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Describe a health problem you or someone you know had. v.1

Describe a health problem you or someone you know had. v. 1
Describe a health problem you or someone you know had. You should say: what it was how you had this health problem what you or this person had to do to get better And discuss how you/ this person felt about this health problem. Sample Answer 1: Gosh, that seems like quite a personal topic!   I don’t think I feel quite comfortable talking about someone else’s health problem, so I’ll pick one that is about me.   Erm, I’ll tell you what it was, how I had it and how eventually I got better.   I’ll also try and explain a bit about how I felt, though that’s hard to do, so you might have to ask me some extra questions to help me make sense of it! So what happened was post-concussion syndrome.   I had a fall from a horse, it wasn’t even that bad a fall, to be honest.   I’d had a riding lesson, and at the end I was sitting on the horse, standing there just chatting to my instructor, we weren’t even moving.   Then something happened on the yard, possibly a load fell off the back of a lorry, or something similar, which made the loudest noise imaginable, my horse was startled and plunged forward instinctively.   I was unprepared, so just toppled off backwards, hitting my head as I did so.   I always wear a hard hat, so that gave me some protection, but it was a hell of a bang.   In cartoons, you see pictures of people seeing stars after being hit on the head, and that is what it was like!   My vision went, and I saw a bright light, and my how it hurt!   However, I didn’t lose consciousness or anything, and I got back on the horse briefly to reassure myself I wouldn’t lose my nerve.   I put the horse away, untacking and brushing her off, and leaving her with a big pile of hay to eat (it wasn’t her fault, the ‘fright and flight’ reaction is pure instinct in a prey animal).   I drove home.   I didn’t feel great, and the next couple of days was the weekend so I didn’t go out, I just slept a lot, and felt a bit sorry for myself. On the Monday, I went into work as usual but felt really peculiar.   It was the first time in a couple of days that I had seen anyone, and I found that it was really difficult to communicate.   I had gaps in my vocabulary, and I was really inappropriately emotional.   The phone on my desk rang, and I just couldn’t answer it, I felt I wouldn’t know what to say.   It was very frightening, I just sat and cried.   A colleague I worked with came in, and it was difficult for me to explain what was wrong as I honestly didn’t know.   She offered to give me a lift home, but I said I’d be OK to make my own way if she would let my boss know.   She knew I must be really poorly, as I’d been working there for over a year and had never before had a day off for anything or even been late to work.   I left the building and then felt quite panicky as I couldn’t remember how to get to the bus stop.   I knew this was bad, but I didn’t know what to do.   I managed to walk home and just went straight to bed. The next week was awful, I just slept, and cried and felt really confused.   I knew I wouldn’t be well enough to go to work as I felt very fearful just going outside.   I made an appointment to see my doctor.   I was very lucky as the person I saw had by chance a particular interest in head injuries.   She explained that everything I was experiencing – the loss of memory, the emotional crying; the fatigue, was actually quite ‘normal’ for some people following an accident of this type.   That was the good news, the bad news is that this is known as a post-concussion syndrome and there isn’t much you can do to get better.   You just have to be patient. However she did say that I’d need to give myself some mental stimulation to help repair the pathways in my brain, so even though it was exhausting and frightening it was important to get out, to go for a walk, or get a cup of coffee.   To begin with, it was very difficult to do these things because I was scared I’d forget where I was and not be able to get home.   I also felt extremely vulnerable because I knew I looked ‘normal’ but might behave in an inappropriate way – like bursting into tears in a shop because they didn’t have the newspaper I wanted.   It’s very difficult to imagine what this is like unless you have experienced it.   You know you are behaving in a way that is odd, and not acceptable, but you simply cannot control it.   I also had a few experiences of meeting people who knew me, but I did not recognise, that was very hard to understand for them and me too! I ended up having two weeks off work, and even when I did go back I struggled for quite some time.   It was many months before I felt my vocabulary was back and I felt like my thinking was laboured and I was exhausted all the time. How did I feel?   Terrified, it was a really horrible experience, and I was very lonely too.   I thought I might not be able to carry on working, and that I would never get better.   I was also worried I would lose my friends because my behaviour was so unpredictable and peculiar.   Still, I try to be positive about these things, and I think it perhaps gave me some understanding and insight into what it must be like for older people with dementia or anyone with an acquired brain injury.   Perhaps it has made me more patient, and now if I see someone doing something odd in the street I consider that they may not mean to be demanding or rude, perhaps they too have had an injury which has changed how they interact with other people.   I feel very lucky that eventually, after about 18 months I am pretty much back to how I was.   I do still really struggle with the names though, and I still don’t always recognise people when I should.   Perhaps I also have that experience of reaching for a memory that isn’t quite there more than I ever did before, but it doesn’t stop me doing anything. The human body is an amazing thing, it does have the capacity to heal, but you need to be patient to let it do so.   It is fragile too, and now I think I appreciate that more as well – it makes me mad if I see cyclists or riders without protective head gear – if I hadn’t been wearing my helmet, well, I think the ending would have been very different. [ Written by - Lucy Marris:   Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam) ]   Sample Answer 2: Sickness creates one of the most uncomfortable situations in human life and when a family member gets sick, other members also go through a great anxiety. So, everybody wants to remain fit, sound and healthy even though it is quite natural to become ill sometimes. There are some diseases that you cannot avoid and asthma, in our country, is one of them. My younger sister has suffered from Asthma for quite a while and she is still not cured perfectly. I would like to thank you for this opportunity to let me talk about this topic. Asthma is a respiratory disorder. When it attacks, the victims have difficulty in breathing. Often they have shortness of breath. Sometimes they become breathless and feel a pressure on the chest. It happens mostly for the inflammation inside the bronchial tubes. But the symptoms are not the same for everyone and may vary from person. Some of the asthma patients get it from allergy while the remaining may have it as non-allergic form. When it is allergic, it may be triggered by any common factors or sources that cause allergy. For the non-allergic asthmas, it can attack at any time without any prior notice. Jessica, my younger is 14 now and have occupied all the features of my mom. Mom is allergic. She cannot endure dust and other usual causes for allergy. Similarly, Jessica also owned such physical features from our mother. When she was 10, she was attacked with asthma for the first time. She felt trouble in her breathing and said that she was also having a pressure on her chest. When she was taken to a doctor, initially it was diagnosed as asthma. Later, she was prescribed some tests to make it confirmed. Finally, the test reports described it as allergic asthma and she should be careful about this. The doctor also opined that she got this genetically and might be it from her mother. It was her first attack and an early warning of the health disorder. Hence, she should remain highly careful about the issue. Asthma is mostly a respiratory disorder and may deteriorate health to the largest extent if not taken care of in the right way. Besides, like the symptoms, the treatment is not also the same for everyone. The doctor initially prescribed her some medications to relieve. Further, he also suggested remain away from the allergy-triggering elements. Usually, it is hard to prevent asthma in a mature age and if the symptoms are not shown early. But Jessica is lucky in some aspects. It is expected that asthma will be under control when she is completely matured. But she needs to be careful about the issue. Regularly, she is to take medications whenever she is attacked. The medicines help to relieve the attack and makes the breathing easier. She also carries an inhaler with her always and uses it whenever needed. Jessica is still a young girl. Like all the other girls of her age, she loves to play outside in the garden. But after the asthma attack, she is not able to continue her daily tasks smoothly. She used to care for the flower plants in the garden in the evening but now she is unable to do that fearing another asthma attack from the outside dust. She is highly careful and even avoids foods that may cause allergy. I feel sad when I see her in the situation of breathlessness. Either she needs to take inhaler if she is outside of home or she takes medicines if she is at home. Unfortunately, my mom and Jessica shares the same problem. Though mom has controlled her allergy to a notable level and does not get attacked, Jessica is still immature to control her asthma. So, I am worried about her indeed.
Describe
a
health
problem
you or someone you
know
had. You should say: what it was how you had this
health
problem
what you or this
person
had to do to
get
better
And discuss how you/ this
person
felt
about this
health
problem
. Sample Answer 1:

Gosh, that seems like
quite
a personal topic!
 
I don’t
think
I
feel
quite
comfortable talking about someone else’s
health
problem
,
so
I’ll pick one
that is
about me.
 
Erm
, I’ll
tell
you what it was, how I had it and how
eventually
I
got
better
.
 
I’ll
also
try and
explain
a bit about how I
felt
, though that’s
hard
to do,
so
you
might
have to
ask me
some
extra questions to
help
me
make
sense of it!
So
what happened was post-concussion syndrome.
 
I had a fall from a
horse
, it wasn’t even that
bad
a fall, to be honest.
 
I’d had a riding lesson, and at the
end
I was sitting on the
horse
, standing there
just
chatting to my instructor, we weren’t even moving.
 
Then something happened on the yard,
possibly
a load fell
off
the
back
of a lorry, or something similar, which made the loudest noise imaginable, my
horse
was startled
and plunged forward instinctively.
 
I
was unprepared
,
so
just
toppled
off
backwards, hitting my head as I did
so
.
 
I always wear a
hard
hat,
so
that gave me
some
protection,
but
it was a hell of a bang.
 
In cartoons, you
see
pictures of
people
seeing stars after
being hit
on the head, and
that is
what it was like!
 
My vision went, and I
saw
a bright light, and my how it hurt!
 
However
, I didn’t lose consciousness or anything, and I
got
back
on the
horse
briefly
to reassure myself I wouldn’t lose my nerve.
 
I put the
horse
away,
untacking
and brushing her
off
, and leaving her with a
big
pile of hay to eat (it wasn’t her fault, the ‘fright and flight’ reaction is pure instinct in a prey animal).
 
I drove home.
 
I
didn’t
feel
great, and the
next
couple of days was the weekend
so
I didn’t go out, I
just
slept a lot, and
felt
a bit sorry for myself. On the Monday, I went into
work
as usual
but
felt
really
peculiar.
 
It was the
first
time
in a couple of days that I had
seen
anyone, and I found that it was
really
difficult
to communicate.
 
I had gaps in my vocabulary, and I was
really
inappropriately
emotional.
 
The phone on my desk rang, and I
just
couldn’t answer it, I
felt
I wouldn’t
know
what to say.
 
It was
very
frightening, I
just
sat and cried.
 
A colleague I worked with came in, and it was
difficult
for me to
explain
what was
wrong
as I
honestly
didn’t
know
.
 
She offered to give me a lift home,
but
I said I’d be OK to
make
my
own
way if she would
let
my boss
know
.
 
She
knew
I
must
be
really
poorly
, as I’d been working there for over a year and had never
before
had a day
off
for anything or even been late to
work
.
 
I
left
the building and then
felt
quite
panicky as I couldn’t remember how to
get
to the bus
stop
.
 
I
knew
this was
bad
,
but
I didn’t
know
what to do.
 
I
managed to walk home and
just
went straight to bed. The
next
week was awful, I
just
slept, and cried and
felt
really
confused.
 
I
knew
I wouldn’t be
well
enough
to go to
work
as I
felt
very
fearful
just
going
outside
.
 
I made an appointment to
see
my
doctor
.
 
I
was
very
lucky as the
person
I
saw
had by chance a particular interest in head injuries.
 
She
explained
that everything I was experiencing
the loss of memory, the emotional crying; the fatigue, was
actually
quite
‘normal’ for
some
people
following an accident of this type.
 
That was the
good
news, the
bad
news is that this
is known
as a post-concussion syndrome and there isn’t much you can do to
get
better
.
 
You
just
have to
be
patient
.
However
she did say that I’d
need
to give myself
some
mental stimulation to
help
repair the pathways in my brain,
so
even though
it was exhausting and frightening it was
important
to
get
out, to go for a walk, or
get
a cup of coffee.
 
To
begin
with, it was
very
difficult
to do these things
because
I
was scared
I’d forget where I was and not be able to
get
home.
 
I
also
felt
extremely
vulnerable
because
I
knew
I looked ‘normal’
but
might
behave
in an inappropriate way
like bursting into tears in a shop
because
they didn’t have the newspaper I wanted.
 
It’s
very
difficult
to imagine what this is like unless you have experienced it.
 
You
know
you are behaving in a way
that is
odd, and not acceptable,
but
you
simply
cannot control it.
 
I
also
had a few experiences of meeting
people
who
knew
me,
but
I did not
recognise
, that was
very
hard
to understand for them and me too! I ended up having two weeks
off
work
, and even when I did go
back
I struggled for
quite
some
time
.
 
It was
many
months
before
I
felt
my vocabulary was
back
and I
felt
like my thinking was
laboured and
I
was exhausted
all the
time
. How did I
feel
?
 
Terrified, it was a
really
horrible experience, and I was
very
lonely too.
 
I
thought
I
might
not be able to carry on working, and that I would never
get
better
.
 
I was
also
worried I would lose my friends
because
my
behaviour
was
so
unpredictable and peculiar.
 
Still
, I try to be
positive
about these things, and I
think
it perhaps gave me
some
understanding and insight into what it
must
be like for older
people
with dementia or anyone with an acquired brain injury.
 
Perhaps it has made me more
patient
, and
now
if I
see
someone doing something odd in the street I consider that they may not mean to be demanding or rude, perhaps they too have had an injury which has
changed
how they interact with
other
people
.
 
I
feel
very
lucky that
eventually
, after about 18 months I am pretty much
back
to how I was.
 
I do
still
really
struggle with the names though, and I
still
don’t always
recognise
people
when I should.
 
Perhaps I
also
have that experience of reaching for a memory that isn’t
quite
there more than I ever did
before
,
but
it doesn’t
stop
me doing anything. The human body is an amazing thing, it does have the capacity to heal,
but
you
need
to be
patient
to
let
it do
so
.
 
It is fragile too, and
now
I
think
I appreciate that more
as
well
it
makes
me mad if I
see
cyclists or riders without protective
head gear
if I hadn’t been wearing my helmet,
well
, I
think
the ending would have been
very
different
.
[
Written by
-
Lucy
Marris
:
 
Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam)
]
 
Sample Answer 2:

Sickness creates one of the most uncomfortable situations in human life and when a family member
gets
sick,
other
members
also
go through a great anxiety.
So
, everybody wants to remain fit, sound and healthy
even though
it is
quite
natural to become
ill
sometimes
. There are
some
diseases that you cannot avoid and asthma, in our country, is one of them. My younger sister has suffered from Asthma for
quite
a
while and
she is
still
not cured
perfectly
. I would like to thank you for this opportunity to
let
me talk about this topic.

Asthma is a respiratory disorder. When it
attacks
, the victims have difficulty in breathing.
Often
they have shortness of breath.
Sometimes
they become breathless and
feel
a pressure on the chest. It happens
mostly
for the inflammation inside the bronchial tubes.
But
the symptoms are not the same for everyone and may vary from
person
.
Some of the
asthma
patients
get
it from
allergy
while the remaining may have it as non-allergic form. When it is allergic, it may
be triggered
by any common factors or sources that cause
allergy
. For the non-allergic
asthmas
, it can
attack
at any
time
without any prior notice. Jessica, my younger is 14
now
and have occupied all the features of my
mom
.
Mom
is allergic. She cannot endure dust and
other
usual causes for
allergy
.
Similarly
, Jessica
also
owned
such physical features from our mother. When she was 10, she
was attacked
with asthma for the
first
time
. She
felt
trouble in her breathing and said that she was
also
having a pressure on her chest. When she
was taken
to a
doctor
,
initially
it
was diagnosed
as asthma. Later, she
was prescribed
some
tests
to
make
it confirmed.
Finally
, the
test
reports
described
it as allergic
asthma and
she should be
careful
about this. The
doctor
also
opined that she
got
this
genetically
and
might
be it from her mother. It was her
first
attack
and an early warning of the
health
disorder.
Hence
, she should remain
highly
careful
about the issue.

Asthma is
mostly
a respiratory disorder and may deteriorate
health
to the largest extent if not taken care of in the
right
way.
Besides
, like the symptoms, the treatment is not
also
the same for everyone. The
doctor
initially
prescribed her
some
medications to relieve.
Further
, he
also
suggested remain away from the allergy-triggering elements.
Usually
, it is
hard
to
prevent
asthma in a mature age and if the symptoms are not shown early.
But
Jessica is lucky in
some
aspects. It is
expected
that asthma will be under control when she is completely matured.
But
she
needs
to be
careful
about the issue.
Regularly
, she is to take medications whenever she
is attacked
. The medicines
help
to relieve the
attack
and
makes
the breathing easier. She
also
carries an inhaler with her always and
uses
it whenever needed.

Jessica is
still
a young girl. Like all the
other
girls of her age, she
loves
to play
outside
in the garden.
But
after the asthma
attack
, she is not able to continue her daily tasks
smoothly
. She
used
to care for the flower plants in the garden in the evening
but
now
she is unable to do that fearing another asthma
attack
from the
outside
dust. She is
highly
careful
and even avoids foods that may cause
allergy
. I
feel
sad when I
see
her in the situation of breathlessness. Either she
needs
to take inhaler if she is
outside
of
home or
she takes medicines if she is at home. Unfortunately, my
mom
and Jessica shares the same
problem
. Though
mom
has controlled her
allergy
to a notable level and does not
get
attacked, Jessica is
still
immature to control her asthma.
So
, I
am worried
about her
indeed
.
39Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
158Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
75Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a health problem you or someone you know had. v. 1

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