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Describe a hobby that one of your friends has. v.1

Describe a hobby that one of your friends has. v. 1
Describe a hobby that one of your friends has. You should say: what hobby it is which friend of yours has this hobby what this friend does for it and explain whether this is a good or bad hobby in your opinion.   Model Answer 1: I have many friends who have different kinds of hobbies. Of course, it all depends on their moods, circumstances, trends as well as the weather. However, today I would like to talk about one of those friends of mine who likes to enjoy cycling whenever he gets time. The friend, I am talking about here, is one of my childhood friends from my high school. My friend, Ryan, wasn’t really a very active person like the other boys of his age when he was attending high school. In fact, when we were enjoying playing football or badminton with other friends of mine, Ryan would sit on the sideline and enjoy our game. In other words, he was more of a spectator than a participant of the game. But, everything changed, if I remember it correctly, when he got a bicycle as a gift from one of his uncles. By the way, the gift was given to Ryan because of finishing his junior college with a top grade, and also because of getting admission at one of the prestigious colleges of my country. Since then, Ryan actually became addicted to cycling whenever he would manage some extra time outside of his studies. Sometimes, he would even refuse to hang out with us because he would want to spend time cleaning his bicycle and checking its parts in order to make sure that his bicycle was in good shape. Anyway, Ryan would love to ride his bicycle anytime or any season, but he would love it even more during the summertime. In my humble opinion, I think that it is a good hobby because it keeps Ryan physically active, especially, when he doesn’t like any other physical activities. Besides, this particular hobby also allows him to become close to the mother nature in the outdoor in order to feel more lively instead of just sitting at home idle. Finally, I think that this hobby also gives my friend a boost in his confidence to socialize with others, a good habit he lacks.   Sample Answer 2: Many of my friends have hobbies that they particularly enjoy and some of those hobbies are very common while some of them are very interesting. One of my friends, whose name is (. . . say a name. . . ), collects autographs of famous people and this is in my opinion, is an interesting hobby. This friend is nurturing this hobby for more than 15 years and he has a good collection of autographs of many famous personalities of our country as well as some internationally renowned persons. In my early childhood, we were surprised to notice that he has great courage and patience to go near a famous person even in tight security and finally taking this person's autograph. We sometimes enjoyed it and sometimes we found ourself surprised by the amount of effort and passion he could put on it. Later on, we thought that it is an adolescence passion would go away with time. But surprisingly he still has this same hobby and a few months back when he showed me his collection of autographs, I was simply speechless. He has a collection of more than 2000 autographs in his diary, books and in other places including many world-renowned writers, politicians, actors, players and other famous people. I value his passion and inspiration for collecting the autograph and that's why I possess positive thinking about this hobby of my friend. Having some kind of activity and passion is always positive and this helps us learning many new things and experiencing many new things which otherwise would not have been possible. So I would opine that this is a good hobby and I am proud of my friend for his hobby and great collection.      Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe a hobby you once had. Describe a hobby one of your family members has.   Describe a hobby or habit you wish you had.   Describe your favourite past time.
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Describe
a
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hobby
that one of your
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friends
has. You should say: what
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hobby
it is which
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friend
of yours has this
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hobby
what this
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friend
does for it and
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explain
whether this is a
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good
or
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bad
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hobby
in your opinion.
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Model Answer 1:

I have
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many
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friends
who have
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different
kinds of
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hobbies
.
Of course
, it all depends on their moods, circumstances, trends as
well
as the weather.
However
,
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today
I would like to talk about one of those
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friends
of mine who likes to enjoy cycling whenever he
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gets
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time
. The
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friend
, I am talking about here, is one of my childhood
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friends
from my high school.

My
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friend
, Ryan, wasn’t
really
a
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very
active person like the
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other
boys of his age when he was attending high school. In fact, when we were enjoying playing football or badminton with
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other
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friends
of mine, Ryan would sit on the sideline and enjoy our game. In
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other
words, he was more of a spectator than a participant of the game.

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But
, everything
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changed
, if I remember it
correctly
, when he
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got
a
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bicycle
as a gift from one of his uncles. By the way, the gift was
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given
to Ryan
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because
of finishing his junior college with a top grade, and
also
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because
of getting admission at one of the prestigious colleges of my country. Since then, Ryan
actually
became addicted to cycling whenever he would manage
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some
extra
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time
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outside of
his studies.
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Sometimes
, he would even refuse to hang out with us
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because
he would want to spend
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time
cleaning his
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bicycle
and checking its parts in order to
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make
sure that his
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bicycle
was in
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good
shape.
Anyway
, Ryan would
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love
to ride his
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bicycle
anytime or any season,
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but
he would
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love
it even more during the
Consider using "summer".
summertime
.

In my humble opinion, I
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think
that it is a
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good
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hobby
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because
it
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keeps
Ryan
physically
active,
especially
, when he doesn’t like any
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other
physical activities.
Besides
, this particular
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hobby
also
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allows
him to become close to the mother nature in the outdoor in order to feel more lively
instead
of
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just
sitting at home idle.
Finally
, I
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think
that this
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hobby
also
gives my
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friend
a boost in his confidence to socialize with others, a
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good
habit he lacks.
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Sample Answer 2:

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Many
of my
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friends
have
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hobbies
that they
particularly
enjoy and
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some
of those
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hobbies
are
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very
common while
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some
of them are
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very
interesting. One of my
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friends
, whose name is (.
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.
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.
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say
a name.
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.
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.
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)
, collects
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autographs
of
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famous
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people
and this is in my opinion, is an interesting
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hobby
. This
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friend
is nurturing this
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hobby
for more than 15
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years and
he has a
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good
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collection
of
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autographs
of
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many
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famous
personalities of our country as
well
as
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some
internationally
renowned persons.

In my early childhood, we
were surprised
to notice that he has great courage and patience to go near a
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famous
person even in tight security and
finally
taking this person's
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autograph
. We
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sometimes
enjoyed it and
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sometimes
we found
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ourself
surprised by the amount of effort and
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passion
he could put on it. Later on, we
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thought
that it is an adolescence
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passion
would go away with
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time
.
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But
surprisingly
he
still
has this same
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hobby
and a few months back when he
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showed
me his
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collection
of
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autographs
, I was
simply
speechless. He has a
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collection
of more than 2000
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autographs
in his diary, books and in
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other
places including
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many
world-renowned writers, politicians, actors, players and
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other
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famous
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people
.

I value his
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passion
and inspiration for collecting the
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autograph
and that's why I possess
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positive
thinking about this
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hobby
of my
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friend
. Having
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some
kind of activity and
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passion
is always
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positive
and this
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helps
us
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learning
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many
new things and experiencing
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many
new things which
otherwise
would not have been possible.
So
I would opine that this is a
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good
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hobby and
I am proud of my
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friend
for his
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hobby
and great
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collection
.
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as
well
:
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hobby
you once had.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hobby
one of your family members has.
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You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hobby
or habit you wish you had.
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Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
your
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favourite
past
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
.
20Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
78Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a hobby that one of your friends has. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
8 paragraphs
734 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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