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Describe a handcrafted item which you made yourself. v.1

Describe a handcrafted item which you made yourself. v. 1
Describe a handcrafted item which you made yourself. You should say: what it was how you made it what you did with it and explain how you felt about making it yourself. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you're going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Sample Answer 1: Kite flying is a popular activity in China and I have made different types of kites on various occasions all by myself. For this cue card topic, I would love to talk about a dragon kite that I made when I was around 16 years old. Qingming Festival, also known as Tomb Sweeping Day, is a traditional and widely celebrated festival in China and it usually falls in April. During this festival, many people, especially children and young, play around with a variety of kites. On such an occasion I made a kite which was more than 4 feet in length and looked like a red dragon. This sort of kite is usually called dragon kite and it is quite tough to make and fly. When a traditional kite might take an hour to be made, a dragon kite sometimes takes more than a week, depending on the size and shape of it. It took me more than 4 days to complete this kite and I required to purchase some special papers, colour, plastic, glue, ribbon, and sticks to make this kite. First I had to use the sticks of different sizes to build the main shape of the kite. The sticks were linked to each other very strongly and I used glue, sticks and plastic to make the final shape of the kite. Then I  checked whether the structure was strong enough to fly or not. After that,   I wrapped the frame with colourful papers and plastics to give it a beautiful shape. I was quite happy to see the final outcome and was convinced that it would fly without any obstacle. The wings of the dragon were more than 1 feet each and I had to be very careful while making it. Any wrong shape of the wing would actually ruin the whole project. I had to make it strong while keeping it light. That was a tough challenge but luckily I was quite successful in making the final kite. When I made the kite and finally flew it in the sky, it was a great experience for me. I was relieved that it was flying and looked good. People were looking at that large size dragon kite and some of them appreciated it. It was embracing the white cloud in the sky and went higher than most other kites. It was moving as if a great dragon was acting as a guardian of the sky and protecting the people below it. I was quite excited when it finally declared its prominence in the sky.
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Describe
a handcrafted item which you made yourself. You should say: what it was how you made it what you did with it and
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explain
how you felt about making it yourself. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you're going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
Sample Answer
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1: Kite
flying is a popular activity in China and I have made
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different
types of
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kites
on various occasions all by myself. For this cue card topic, I would
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love
to talk about a dragon
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kite
that I made when I was around 16 years
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old
.

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Qingming
Festival,
also
known as Tomb Sweeping Day, is a traditional and
widely
celebrated festival in China and it
usually
falls in April. During this festival,
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many
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people
,
especially
children and young, play around with a variety of
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kites
. On such an occasion I made a
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kite
which was more than
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4 feet
in length and looked like a red dragon. This sort of
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kite
is
usually
called dragon
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kite
and it is
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quite
tough to
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make
and
fly
. When a traditional
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kite
might take an hour to
be made
, a dragon
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kite
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sometimes
takes more than a week, depending on the size and
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shape
of it.

It took me more than 4 days to complete this
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kite
and I required to
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purchase
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some
special papers,
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colour
, plastic, glue, ribbon, and
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sticks
to
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make
this
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kite
.
First
I had to
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use
the
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sticks
of
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different
sizes to build the main
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shape
of the
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kite
. The
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sticks
were linked
to each other
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very
strongly
and I
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used
glue,
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sticks
and plastic to
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make
the final
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shape
of the
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kite
. Then I
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checked
whether the structure was strong
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enough
to
fly
or not. After that,
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I wrapped the frame with
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colourful
papers and plastics to give it a
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beautiful
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shape
. I was
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quite
happy to
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see
the final outcome and
was convinced
that it would
fly
without any obstacle. The wings of the dragon were more than
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1 feet
each and I had to be
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very
careful while making it. Any
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wrong
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shape
of the wing would
actually
ruin the whole project. I had to
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make
it strong while keeping it light. That was a tough challenge
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but
luckily I was
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quite
successful in making the final kite.

When I made the
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kite
and
finally
flew it in the sky, it was a great experience for me. I
was relieved
that it was flying and looked
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good
.
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People
were looking at that large size dragon
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kite
and
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some
of them appreciated it. It was embracing the white cloud in the sky and went higher than most other
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kites
. It was moving as if a great dragon was acting as a guardian of the sky and protecting the
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people
below it. I was
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quite
excited when it
finally
declared its prominence in the sky.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
You can never understand one language until you understand at least two.
Geoffrey Willans

IELTS speaking Describe a handcrafted item which you made yourself. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
500 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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