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You recently went shopping at the local supermarket. When you got home and noticed your bill, you found that you had been charged for items you did not purchase. v.6

You recently went shopping at the local supermarket. When you got home and noticed your bill, you found that you had been charged for items you did not purchase. v. 6
Dear Sir or Madam, Yesterday I purchased a few products from your store. After I got back home and noticed the bill, I was surprised to find that I had been overcharged. I am hoping that you would take steps not to repeat such mistakes and return me the overcharged amount. In relation to the specifics of the bill, I went to your Daily Needs shop on 28th March 2020 at around 5. 30 pm and purchased 6 items in total. I paid $230. 50 for the items using my Master Card issued by City Bank. The invoice number is 28-462014 and I am attaching a copy of my receipt. The issue the bill is that my actual invoice should have been 49. 45 dollars less than the amount paid. The invoice indicates that I bought 9 items, which is a mistake. I have been charged for a pair of socks, a bottle of virgin olive oil and an air freshener which I never did purchase. As a solution, and because I am a loyal customer of your shop, I am hoping that you will agree to refund me the extra amount or adjust it with my next bill. Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear your reply soon. Yours faithfully, Tommy Lee
Dear Sir or Madam,

Yesterday I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
a few products from your store. After I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
back home and noticed the bill, I
was surprised
to find that I had
been overcharged
. I am hoping that you would take steps not to repeat such mistakes and return me the overcharged amount.

In relation to the specifics of the bill, I went to your Daily Needs shop on 28th March 2020 at around 5. 30 pm and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
6 items in total. I paid $230. 50 for the items using my Master Card issued by City Bank. The invoice number is
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
28-462014 and
I am attaching a copy of my receipt.

The issue the bill is that my actual invoice should have been 49. 45 dollars less than the amount paid. The invoice indicates that I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
9 items, which is a mistake. I have
been charged
for a pair of socks, a bottle of virgin olive oil and an air freshener which I never did
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
.

As a solution, and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I am a loyal customer of your shop, I am hoping that you will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
to refund me the extra amount or adjust it with my
next
bill.

Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear your reply
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Tommy Lee
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS letter You recently went shopping at the local supermarket. When you got home and noticed your bill, you found that you had been charged for items you did not purchase. v. 6

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
218 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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