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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Sir, My name is Mary and I am currently residing in 'Girls Hostel' of your esteemed college. My room number is 204 and two other roommates also share that room with me. I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the room arrangements. Actually one of my roommates named Sharon is a great nuisance to me. She is pursuing her studies in physical education and is a notorious student of the hostel. She is completely a manner less girl and pay no heed to the sentiments of others. Because of her silly pranks and carelessness I am unable to focus on my studies. Last week, she brought her friends in the room for a party and started playing loud music. Me and the other two roommates failed to concentrate on our project work. Although we requested her to throw parties in the college canteen or outside the campus, yet she denied all our requests. Besides, she used to create mess in the room. Her filthy clothes remain scattered here and there. We did complain to the college wardon but of no use. Therefore, I request you to change my room or my room partner so that I can pay attention to my college work. I shall be very thankful to you for this act of kindness. Looking forward for positive response. Yours faithfully, Mary.
Dear Sir,

My name is
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Mary and
I am
currently
residing in 'Girls Hostel' of your esteemed college. My
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room
number is 204 and two other roommates
also
share that
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room
with me. I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the
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room
arrangements.

Actually one of my roommates named Sharon is a great nuisance to me. She is pursuing her studies in physical education and is a notorious student of the hostel. She is completely a manner less girl and pay no heed to the sentiments of others.
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Because
of her silly pranks and carelessness I am unable to focus on my studies.

Last week, she brought her friends in the
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room
for a party and
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started
playing loud music. Me and the other two roommates failed to concentrate on our project work. Although we requested her to throw parties in the college canteen or outside the campus,
yet
she denied all our requests.
Besides
, she
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used
to create mess in the
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room
. Her filthy clothes remain scattered here and there.

We did complain to the college
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wardon
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of no
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.
Therefore
, I request you to
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change
my
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room
or my
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room
partner
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so
that I can pay attention to my college work. I shall be
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very
thankful to you for this act of kindness.

Looking forward for
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positive
response.

Yours
faithfully
,

Mary.
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IELTS letter You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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225 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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