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You bought a camera from local branch of the company, but some items missed.

You bought a camera from local branch of the company, but some items missed. r89kk
Dear sirI am writing to inform you about the camera which I bought from the local branch of your company. As you know I am one of your loyal consumers for a long time who uses a lot of products of your company with satisfaction. However, I recently bought a 4. 8mp camera from local mall in our city. When I came home I realized that some functions of the product do not work certain. I trust that you always protect your loyal customers' rights. I will send the camera and please change it for new one that works perfectly or fix it and send to me as soon as possible. You could contact me On number 1234556Via telegram @ms lola telegramYours faithfullyMs lola Adams
Dear
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writing to inform you about the camera which I
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bought
from the local branch of your
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company
. As you know I am one of your loyal consumers for a long time who
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uses
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a lot of
products of your
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company
with satisfaction.
However
, I recently
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bought
a 4. 8mp camera from local mall in our city.
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When
I came home I realized that
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some
functions of the product do not work certain. I trust that you always protect your loyal customers' rights. I will
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send
the camera and
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please
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change
it for new one that works
perfectly
or
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fix
it and
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send
to me as
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soon
as possible. You could contact me On number 1234556Via telegram
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@ms
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lola
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telegramYours
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faithfullyMs
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lola
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IELTS letter You bought a camera from local branch of the company, but some items missed.

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  American English
1 paragraphs
124 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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