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You are going to study at a college in the UK next year. You would like to stay in the college Hall of Residence. Write a letter to the college giving your accommodation requirements. You should outline what your room and food needs are, and also ask what alternatives are available if they cannot provide what you want.

Dear Sir or Madam, I have recently enrolled in your college and my class will commence at the beginning of next year. I am writing to request you to arrange my accommodation in the college hostel or suggest an alternative. My major is 'Economics' and my class will start in August 2020. I will travel from Japan would prefer to stay in the college residence hall. I would like a single room either on the second or third floor with the air-conditioner and laundry facilities. My first preference is to stay at the college hostel. I am a vegetarian and would like to know if our college canteen is vegetarian-friendly. If this is not included in the dining room, would you please inform me if I can avail vegetarian diets from a nearby restaurant? If so, how far those restaurants are? If no suitable room is available in the college hall, would you please suggest me a suitable place to stay in the vicinity of the college? I can share the room with another student and would be ready to pay higher, but the air-conditioner, vegetarian-friendly meals and laundry service are indispensable as they are the foremost factors I am considering now. Looking forward to getting a reply from you. Yours faithfully, Johnny Quan
Dear Sir or Madam,

I have recently enrolled in your college and my
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class
will commence at the beginning of
next
year. I am writing to request you to arrange my accommodation in the college hostel or suggest an alternative.

My major is 'Economics' and my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
in August 2020. I will travel from Japan would prefer to stay in the college residence hall. I would like a single
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
either on the second or third floor with the air-conditioner and laundry facilities. My
first
preference is to stay at the college hostel.

I am a vegetarian and would like to know if our college canteen is vegetarian-friendly. If this is not included in the dining
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
, would you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
inform me if I can avail vegetarian diets from a nearby restaurant? If
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
, how far those restaurants are?

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If
no suitable
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room
is available in the college hall, would you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
suggest me a suitable place to stay in the vicinity of the college? I can share the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
with another student and would be ready to pay higher,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the air-conditioner, vegetarian-friendly meals and laundry service are indispensable as they are the foremost factors I am considering
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
.

Looking forward to getting a reply from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

Johnny
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Quan
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IELTS letter You are going to study at a college in the UK next year. You would like to stay in the college Hall of Residence. Write a letter to the college giving your accommodation requirements. You should outline what your room and food needs are, and also ask what alternatives are available if they cannot provide what you want.

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213 words
6.0
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