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There have been some problems with the public transport you use to commute daily. v.5

There have been some problems with the public transport you use to commute daily. v. 5
Dear Sir or Madam, I understand that this is not the type of letter you would like to see from the commuters who use the transportations of your company, but I am left with no other choices but to write it. We, the local residents, of little lake Tahoma town are dealing with some frustrating problems with our public transportation system who use your transportations almost daily. Your company has only a few public buses in the lake Tahoma town even though it has a rather sizeable population, and those few buses are just not enough to transport users to their desired locations on time. To make things even further complicated, a couple of bus drivers have become a bit too old for their jobs, and as such, they fail to appear for their duties every once in a while, leaving many residents completely clueless about how or when they would reach their destinations. This is not an ideal situation, especially, for the people who have to go to their jobs daily. Therefore, I would like to request you to get some more public buses on our roads immediately, and enough skilled and competent drivers to ensure a smooth commuting system in our town. Yours faithfully, Henry Jones
Dear Sir or Madam,

I understand that this is not the type of letter you would like to
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see
from the commuters who
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use
the transportations of your
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company
,
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but
I am
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left
with no other choices
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but
to write it. We, the local residents, of
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little
lake
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Tahoma
town are dealing with
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some
frustrating problems with our public transportation system who
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use
your transportations almost daily.

Your
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company
has
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only
a few public buses in the lake
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Tahoma
town
even though
it has a
rather
sizeable population, and those few buses are
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just
not
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enough
to transport users to their desired locations on time. To
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make
things even
further
complicated, a couple of bus drivers have become a bit too
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
for their jobs, and as such, they fail to appear for their duties every once in a while, leaving
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
residents completely clueless about how or when they would reach their destinations. This is not an ideal situation,
especially
, for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who
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have to
go to their jobs daily.

Therefore
, I would like to request you to
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get
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
more public buses on our roads immediately, and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
skilled and competent drivers to ensure a smooth commuting system in our town.

Yours
faithfully
,

Henry Jones
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter There have been some problems with the public transport you use to commute daily. v. 5

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
207 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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