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One of your pen pals will shortly be visiting your city. For some reasons, you can not manage to meet him/her at the airport on time. v.6

One of your pen pals will shortly be visiting your city. For some reasons, you can not manage to meet him/her at the airport on time. v. 6
Dear Tommy, I hope you are doing great and enjoying your new job. I am so glad to hear that you are coming to Guangzhou this Sunday. I am so looking forward to meeting you. However, I am writing to inform you that I will be late to receive you at the airport due to an important meeting. Last night my project manager called me to notify me of an important meeting with some customers. The meeting would be held on Sunday at 10. 00 am. So I am afraid I can't catch up with you at the airport at 10: 30 am as planned. The meeting is estimated to end at around 11: 30 am and I will get to the airport as soon as I finish my meeting. Please wait for me for a while. During that time you may collect your baggage and grab some coffee. You can walk around the airport lobby and read some magazines if you like. They have a fabulous canteen from where you can have some snacks. I will probably show up at around 12: 20 pm. I will be wearing a casual blue shirt and black trousers and would be at the terminal number 4. To make things easier I will hold a white placard with your name on it. I will call you in case you can't find me when I get there. Warm wishes, Johnny
Dear Tommy,

I hope you are doing great and enjoying your new job. I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
glad to hear that you are coming to Guangzhou this Sunday.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am
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so
looking forward to
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meeting
you.
However
, I am writing to inform you that I will be late to receive you at the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
airport
due to an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
meeting.

Last night my project manager called me to notify me of an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meeting
with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
customers. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meeting
would
be held
on Sunday at 10. 00 am.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
I am afraid I can't catch up with you at the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
airport
at 10: 30 am as planned. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meeting
is estimated
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
at around 11: 30 am and I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
airport
as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as I finish my meeting.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
wait for me for a while. During that time you may collect your baggage and grab
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
coffee. You can walk around the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
airport
lobby and read
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
magazines if you like. They have a fabulous canteen from where you can have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
snacks. I will
probably
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
up at around 12: 20 pm.

I will be wearing a casual blue shirt and black trousers and would be at the terminal number 4. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
things easier I will hold a white placard with your name on it. I will call you in case you can't find me when I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
there.

Warm wishes,

Johnny
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS letter One of your pen pals will shortly be visiting your city. For some reasons, you can not manage to meet him/her at the airport on time. v. 6

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
235 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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