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From: Mary Subject: Birthday meal

From: Mary Subject: Birthday meal 3x2Jm
Dear Robbie, Glad to write an email to you. It’s been a long time I haven’twritten to you. How are you, Robbie? I hope you’re well. I want we have a lot of fun in your birthday. So I think eating in restaurant is a good idea. Because the food is not only delicious but also very beautiful. We’re going to decorate the restaurant to make it prettier. I now that all of us don’t like to eat vegetarian food. So I want to eat in buger restaurant. Because Everyone wants to try some different kinds of burgers. Can we go to restaurant together? Because my bicycle is broken and the restaurant is far away so I can’t walk Can you offer the food? Because I see in the menu is lots of delicious food. Write me soon, Love, Mary.
Dear Robbie,

Glad to write an email to you. It’s been a long time I
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to you. How are you, Robbie? I hope you’re well.

I want we have
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a lot of
fun
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in your birthday
.
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eating in
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delicious
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it prettier.

I
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that all of us don’t like to eat vegetarian food.
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I want to eat in
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Because
Everyone wants to try
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different
kinds of burgers.

Can we go to
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together?
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my bicycle
is broken
and the
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restaurant
is far away
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so
I can’t
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walk


Can you offer the food?
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in the menu is lots of delicious food.

Write me
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Love
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Mary.

IELTS letter From: Mary Subject: Birthday meal

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
140 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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