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After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department. Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department. In the letter mention: Why do you want to switch departments? Which department would you prefer? Why do you think you are a good fit in that department?

After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department. Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department. In the letter mention: Why do you want to switch departments? Which department would you prefer? Why do you think you are a good fit in that department? owOK
Dear Sir, I am Gurpreet kaur working in the front office desk past 3 years in your company. As you are aware that I have been performing my task with at a satisfactorly level. Today I am writing this letter to request you for my transfere to an admin department. My duty hours are from morning 8 am to evening 7 pm. If you remeber I told you about me taking up evening classes for cooking, i am glad to inform that I have joined one, which will start from this month end. My classes start at 7 pm so I need to leave my office by 6pm to reach there on time. In refrence to my past experience in other companies, I am able to handle the adminstration with much proficiency, moerover there will be vacancy in the admin dept by next week, as Neha will be leaving. Being in the comapny for the past 4 years, I am well versed with the functioning of the company and my pervious experience of the admin department will help the company to function smoothly. Closing this letter with hope of recieving postive response from you. Thank you Regards Gurpreet Kaur
Dear Sir,

I am
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Gurpreet
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kaur
working in the front office desk past 3 years in your
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company
.
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As
you are aware that I have been performing my task with at a
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satisfactorly
level.
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Today
I am writing this letter to request you for my
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transfere
to an admin department.

My duty hours are from morning 8 am
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to evening
7 pm. If you
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remeber
I
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told
you about me taking up evening classes for cooking,
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i
am glad to inform that I have
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joined
one, which will
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start
from this month
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end
. My classes
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start
at 7 pm
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so
I need to
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leave
my office by 6pm to reach there on time.

In
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refrence
to my
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past experience
in other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
, I am able to handle the
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adminstration
with much proficiency,
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moerover
there will be vacancy in the admin dept by
next
week, as
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Neha
will be leaving.

Being in the
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comapny
for the past 4 years, I am well versed with the functioning of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
and my
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pervious
experience of the admin department will
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help
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
to function
smoothly
.

Closing this letter with hope of
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recieving
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postive
response from you.

Thank you

Regards

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Gurpreet
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Kaur
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IELTS letter After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department. Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department. In the letter mention: Why do you want to switch departments? Which department would you prefer? Why do you think you are a good fit in that department?

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  American English
7 paragraphs
198 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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