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Zoos are sometimes seen as necessary but not poor alternatives to a natural environment. Discuss some of the arguments for and against keeping animals in zoos.

Zoos are sometimes seen as necessary but not poor alternatives to a natural environment. Discuss some of the arguments for and against keeping animals in zoos. B2Xj
Zoos are sometimes seen as necessary, but not a poor alternative to a natural environment. Discuss some of the arguments for and against keeping animals in zoos. Nothing is more barbaric than destroying the peace of someone's livelihood, poaching them and destroying their natural habitats. Humans from a very ancient time had close coordination with animals and other living creatures. They have been using them as pets, for cultivation and moreover, as food in many sorts. Thus, keeping animals in zoos can be considered both negative and positive considering a various perspective of the situations. Regarding the positive sides, climate change, like the wildfires and intensive cold weather, is causing disastrous effects in the lives of animals at an enormous rate. Millions of species are dead and many are in danger, and rescuing those species of endangered animals from such calamitous situations can be done with the help of an artificial ecosystem like the zoo. Moreover, zoos can be the place for researches and considered to be an area where our young generations could enjoy and learn about various rare species. On the contrary, considering the confinement and artificial ecosystem that animals have to adjust within a zoo, it is often discarded by the environmentalist as an unsafe place for animals and birds. Zoos often are just the place where men could see the animals and enjoy while small iron cages are applied to enclose the otherwise free animals and birds. Moreover, the authority often tries to cash out the animals and entertain the visitors which is cruel. Taking a look at the real purpose of the existence of zoo and various benefits that have been delivered to the animal kingdom, along with understanding the negative effects of zoos, it can be stated that zoos can sometimes be seen as required but, it is a rather bad alternative to a natural environment.
Zoos are
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as necessary,
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but
not a poor alternative to a natural environment. Discuss
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some of the
arguments for and against keeping
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animals
in zoos.

Nothing is more barbaric than destroying the peace of someone's livelihood, poaching them and destroying their natural habitats. Humans from a
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very
ancient time had close coordination with
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animals
and other living creatures. They have been using them as pets, for cultivation and
moreover
, as food in
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many
sorts.
Thus
, keeping
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animals
in zoos can
be considered
both
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negative
and
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positive
considering a various perspective of the situations.

Regarding the
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positive
sides, climate
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change
, like the wildfires and intensive
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cold
weather, is causing disastrous effects in the
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lives
of
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animals
at an enormous rate. Millions of species are dead and
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many
are in
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danger
, and rescuing those species of endangered
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animals
from such calamitous situations can
be done
with the
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help
of an artificial ecosystem like the zoo.
Moreover
, zoos can be the place for researches and considered to be an area where our young generations could enjoy and learn about various rare species.

On the contrary
, considering the confinement and artificial ecosystem that
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animals
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have to
adjust within a zoo, it is
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often
discarded by the environmentalist as an unsafe place for
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animals
and birds. Zoos
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often are
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just
the place where
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men
could
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see
the
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animals
and enjoy while
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small
iron cages
are applied
to enclose the
otherwise
free
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animals
and birds.
Moreover
, the authority
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often
tries to cash out the
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animals
and entertain the visitors which is cruel.

Taking a look at the real purpose of the existence of zoo and various benefits that have
been delivered
to the
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animal
kingdom, along with understanding the
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negative
effects of zoos, it can
be stated
that zoos can
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sometimes
be
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seen
as required
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but
, it is a
rather
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bad
alternative to a natural environment.
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IELTS essay Zoos are sometimes seen as necessary but not poor alternatives to a natural environment. Discuss some of the arguments for and against keeping animals in zoos.

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