Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Young managers should manage and direct companies rather than old ones. Do you agree or disagree?

Young managers should manage and direct companies rather than old ones. rbaLo
Management throughout the world has tendency to become youth orientation. Some people believe Youth should be managers of companies due to their brilliant new ideas and their energy. I agree with this belief and I explain my point of view in this essay. Young managers should replace old ones because they think out of box and have new ideas, also they can manage teamwork better with their friendly manner. Young manager has more technology awareness and can use new methods and technologies in their work that would make the work faster and more accurate, so it can be beneficial for company’s productivity. On the other hand, they do friendly teamwork jobs without considering tough hierarchy of old managements and use all capacity of their personnel minds through brain storming sessions in order to find new ways of tackling problems and doing work more smoothly. Young managers should manage and direct companies rather than old ones because have more energy in comparison to old ones. They are more healthy and do not struggle with age-related sicknesses, so they can tolerate more work pressure. For example, they can work long hours without fatigues. They manage to handle many tasks together without mixing and messing them up. To conclude, choosing younger manager instead of old management would help company productivity and prosperity as they have are more energetic and have fresh ideas.
Management throughout the world has tendency to become youth orientation.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe Youth should be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
managers
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
due to their brilliant
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
and their energy. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this belief and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
my point of view in this essay.

Young
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
managers
should replace
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
old
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ones
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
out of box and have
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
,
also
they can manage teamwork better with their friendly manner. Young
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
manager
has more technology awareness and can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
methods and technologies in their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
that would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
faster and more accurate,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
it can be beneficial for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company’s
productivity.
On the other hand
, they do friendly teamwork jobs without considering tough hierarchy of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
old
managements and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
all capacity of their personnel minds through brain storming sessions in order to find
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
ways of tackling problems and doing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
more
smoothly
.

Young
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
managers
should manage and direct
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
rather
than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
old
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ones
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
have more energy
in comparison
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
old
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ones
. They are more healthy and do not struggle with age-related sicknesses,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
they can tolerate more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
pressure.
For example
, they can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
long hours without fatigues. They manage to handle
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
tasks together without mixing and messing them up.

To conclude
, choosing younger
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
manager
instead
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
old
management would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
productivity and prosperity as they have
Use past participle here: "been".
are
more energetic and have fresh
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Young managers should manage and direct companies rather than old ones.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
229 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts