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we cannot help everyone in the world that needs helps, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.16

Do you think you should help everyone or only help to who's you are able to? Personally I agree with second one. Someone who needs to help means needy. In the World needy persons increasing every year. Resource of the United Nations shows 132million people in 2019, 168million people in 2020 became a needy. The United Nations guess this going to increase 235million people in 2021. First of the reasons are; Wars, Economic Slumps, Natural Disasters and Personal Mistakes make people needy. Someone helps to charity associations in the World, someone helps to relatives and someone try to help who's seems needy. There is a to much option to help to needies. But, which one is the true way? Islamic ways are explaining help someone who's you know needy. We might make a foundation exploit who's needy on markets, on bakers, on malls, on butchers, on hospitals and on the schools. Personally I think if you're not a richer, you ought to try this way because, there is a too much people act look like a needy and they put lot of effort for take payment! My opinion is when you want to change something isn't okey, first start with yourself. If you don't like a city color, first you should start paint with your wall. Do you agree with? Have a good days. .
Do you
think
you should
help
everyone or
only
help
to
who's you are
able to?
Personally
I
agree
with second one.

Someone who needs to
help
means
needy
. In the World
needy
persons increasing every year. Resource of the United Nations
shows
132million
people
in 2019, 168million
people
in 2020 became a
needy
. The United Nations guess this going to increase 235million
people
in 2021.
First
of the reasons are; Wars, Economic Slumps, Natural Disasters and Personal Mistakes
make
people
needy.

Someone
helps
to charity associations in the World, someone
helps
to relatives and someone
try
to
help
who's
seems
needy
. There is a
to
much option to
help
to
needies
.
But
, which one is the true way?

Islamic ways are explaining
help
someone
who's
you know
needy
. We might
make
a foundation exploit
who's
needy
on markets, on bakers, on malls, on butchers, on hospitals and on the schools.
Personally
I
think
if you're not a richer, you ought to try this way
because
, there is a too much
people
act look like a
needy and
they put
lot of
effort for take payment! My opinion is when you want to
change
something isn'
t okey
,
first
start
with yourself. If you don't like a city color,
first
you should
start
paint with your wall. Do you
agree
with? Have a
good
days
.
.
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IELTS essay We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
225 words
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