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It is true that the violence crimes details are increasingly shared on the media including television and newspapers. While some people believe that it is the right of the viewer to know everything. I think it is unnecessary details that can cause more harm than benefit. On the one hand, it is the right of every viewer to understand and know what is happening in his community to be able to protect himself and his family. For example, by knowing the kind of the places those criminals target, it would be easy to avoid them specially late in night. On the other hand, those specific details might cause bad impact. Firstly, it might terrify the viewers and cause panic wave in the community. Secondly, sharing those contents with psychologically unstable people may result in creating copycat criminals. In conclusion, sharing the crimes details can have a harmful effect on the community, though some people argue that it is the viewer right to know, however the undesired effects outweigh the expected benefits.

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viewer
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think
 it is unnecessary You use this word too often, consider replacing it withminutiae
details
 that can cause more harm than benefit. On the one hand, it is the right of every You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwatcherobserverspectatoronlooker
viewer
 to understand and know what is happening in his community to be able to protect himself and his family. For example
, by knowing the kind of the places those criminals target, it would be easy to avoid them specially
 late in night. On the other hand
, those specific You use this word too often, consider replacing it withminutiae
details
 might cause This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :evil
bad
 impact. Firstly
, it might terrify the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwatcherobserverspectatoronlooker
viewers
 and cause panic wave in the community. Secondly
, sharing those contents with psychologically
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people
 may result in creating copycat criminals. In conclusion
, sharing the crimes You use this word too often, consider replacing it withminutiae
details
 can have a harmful effect on the community, though This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 argue that it is the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwatcherobserverspectatoronlooker
viewer
 right to know, however
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expected
 benefits. 