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Using computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on children. Do you agree or disagree?

Using computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on children. B1Pp
One of the most conspicuous trends of today's world is the colossal upsurge in the number of people believing that using computer everyday can have more negative effects on children than positive ones. However, I do not accept this statement due to following reasons. As far as benefits of computer are concerned, computer plays an Important role in almost all the fields such as education, medical sciences, research and development etc.
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IELTS essay Using computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on children.

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  American English
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