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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. w1W3
It is widely believed that smart phones and smart computers will make a person intelligent, especially with the growing technology. However, I believe that using any form of technology for too long will have adverse negative effects thus, I strongly agree that there will be more negative impact than positive if one uses computer for long period of time. There are ample examples and justifications as to why an individual should not watch the screen for long, as it damages the retina of the eyes consequently making the eyes weak. Since, parents have started providing their children with the latest technology, they are taking away their childhood, as children are interested in playing video games, online shopping, watching movies instead of any physical exercise. Due to this child obesity, poor eye sight among children is rampant. Example, in India child obesity was around 2% between 1920s and 1990s, the statistics in between 2000s-2020 it has increased to 20%. Furthermore, by promoting physical exercises and games will help an individual grow their personality as they will learn skills like socializing, sportsmanship and keep one fit, which cannot be achieved by watching a screen throughout the day. However, one cannot ignore that computers have made the lives of humans easy as one can get information, entertainment and education about anything and everything while sitting in the comfort of one’s home which was of great help during the global pandemic of COVID-19. In conclusion, though computer has some advantages which appease our lives, one cannot ignore that there are ample of side effect like obesity, laziness, poor eye-sight etc. Thus, it is important to use computer for a limited duration which will help maintain a balance between online and offline lives individuals.
It is
widely
believed that smart phones and smart computers will
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make
a person intelligent,
especially
with the growing technology.
However
, I believe that using any form of technology for too long will have adverse
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negative
effects
thus
, I
strongly
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agree
that there will be more
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negative
impact than
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positive
if one
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uses
computer for long period of time.

There are ample examples and justifications as to why an individual should not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
the screen for long, as it damages the retina of the eyes
consequently
making the eyes weak. Since, parents have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
providing their children with the latest technology, they are taking away their childhood, as children
are interested
in playing video games, online shopping, watching movies
instead
of any physical exercise. Due to this child obesity, poor
This word is usually spelt together: "eyesight".
eye sight
among children is rampant. Example, in India child obesity was around 2% between 1920s and 1990s, the statistics in between 2000s-2020 it has increased to 20%.

Furthermore
, by promoting physical exercises and games will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
an individual grow their personality as they will learn
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
like socializing, sportsmanship and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
one fit, which cannot
be achieved
by watching a screen throughout the day.
However
, one cannot
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignore
that computers have made the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
of humans easy as one can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
information, entertainment and education about anything and everything while sitting in the comfort of one’s home which was of great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
during the global pandemic of COVID-19.

In conclusion
, though computer has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
advantages which appease our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
, one cannot
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignore
that there are ample of side effect like obesity, laziness, poor eye-sight etc.
Thus
, it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
computer for a limited duration which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
maintain a balance between online and offline
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
individuals.
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IELTS essay Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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