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These days some people are involved in dangerous activities such as extreme skiing, motorcycles jumping, Are you in favor? If yes then why?

These days some people are involved in dangerous activities such as extreme skiing, motorcycles jumping, Are you in favor? If yes then why? BJWxw
Recent days, there has been a colossal upsurge in the trends to see prodigies discussing whether extreme sports activities such as skiing, bike jumping etcetera are good for people or not. Every individual has a distinct perspective in this regard. This essay will elaborate both sides of the argument to prudently persuade why these games are dangerous and should be avoided. To commence with, these games are risky and can have dreadful consequences. More specifically, people who indulge in such activities are jeopardizing their lives, especially when these actions are done by a novice and without any proper guidance. In India, for example, every year many accident cases are reported where youngsters have died while performing motorcycle race or stunts. Seen in this light, it is evident that these games are life-threatening. Despite the argument above, one school of thought believe that these games are very entertaining and thrilling. Moreover, some teenagers do such actions to boast in front of their friends. However, risking one’s life only to add thrill or show-off, seems to be foolish. Therefore, consistent with this line of thinking, these actions are life-risking and have no positive effect on an individual or on the society In conclusion, I radically feel and believe that people should not be involved in extreme games. Consequently, I would suggest that government should step forward and should ban such games.
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see
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good
for
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people
or not. Every individual has a distinct perspective in this regard. This essay will elaborate both sides of the argument to
prudently
persuade why these
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games
are
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dangerous
and should
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.

To commence with, these
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games
are risky and can have dreadful consequences. More
specifically
,
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people
who indulge in such activities are jeopardizing their
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lives
,
especially
when these actions
are done
by a novice and without any proper guidance. In India,
for example
, every year
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many
accident cases
are reported
where youngsters have
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died
while performing motorcycle race or stunts.
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Seen
in this light, it is evident that these
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games
are life-threatening.

Despite the argument above, one school of
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thought
believe that these
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games
are
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very
entertaining and thrilling.
Moreover
,
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some
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teenagers
do such actions to boast in front of their friends.
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, risking one’s life
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only
to
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thrill or
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-off, seems to be foolish.
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positive
effect on an individual or on the society

In conclusion
, I
radically
feel and believe that
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people
should not
be involved
in extreme
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games
.
Consequently
, I would suggest that
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government
should step forward and should ban such
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games
.
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IELTS essay These days some people are involved in dangerous activities such as extreme skiing, motorcycles jumping, Are you in favor? If yes then why?

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229 words
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