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The story about my big family

The story about my big family bOleP
I am living in an extended family. There are 6 people in my family: my grandparents, my parent, me and my little sister. Actually Im really busy for study so I don't have much time for all member, but in my free times I always have diner or watching the TV shows toghether. The person I love most in my family is my grandma, she is the only member understand to me in my relatives and she knew what is the best to me? so I really love her and I always spend a little time in the morning to go to the market with her. Living in an extended family, we certainly have any problems from everythings but we always sit down and lend in ear toghether so we have a wonderfull relationship!
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is my grandma, she is the
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her and I always spend a
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IELTS essay The story about my big family

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
134 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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