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The recent article on subdivided units in Hong Kong has stirred up heated controversies on weather or not it should exist.

The recent article on subdivided units in Hong Kong has stirred up heated controversies on weather or not it should exist. ojLb
The recent article on subdivided units in Hong Kong has stirred up heated controversies on weather or not it should exist. While a lot of people strongly against the appearance of subdivided houses, saying that it is inhumane and makes tenants’ live miserable, I personally support it as I believe that at least these houses render people a roof. Following I will stating my reasons and provide several suggestions to landlords for improving the life quality of their tenants. First and foremost, subdivided unit is a kind of special house in Hong Kong, which is extremely narrow and can only accommodate a bed as well as a container for belongings. In some peoples’ eyes, this is a terrible place and not suitable for human to live, but to those impoverished citizens, it is actually the last straw that can help them. If there are no existence of subdivided houses, the poor will certainly be more seriously affected. By virtue of expensive private house, they may become homeless people and be forced to sleep in McDonald’s at night or live under flyover. In contrast, providing cheaper subdivided units improves their life a little bit and at least gives them a place to avoid when disasters coming such as typhoon. A table can be set on bed, which also provide children with a space to finish homework after school. Aren’t subdivided units necessary for them? However, although the price of subdivided unit is lower than private one, landlords still need to reduce it in order to improve tenants’ life. Hong Kong is a international city with almost the highest price level around the world, not only on house but also on food, clothes and transportation. As a result, the sum of these number produces a massive pressure on a group of people who have low income, which may cause mental diseases like depression, to name but a few. Therefore, if a landlord would like to assist those individual, one of the best methods is to adjust house price to a suitable situation for both two sides. Since, it not merely decreases their pressure, but can also let them spend more money on the other aspects of the life and increase their quality of life as well. Besides, another action that landlords can do is to promote living environment. Nowadays most of subdivided house in Hong Kong are not safe enough for citizens to live. Some of that do not equip with windows, which make people can not breath fresh air or see sunlight. Consequently, the more and more psychological problems will be produced in this enclosed space. So why don’t landlords ‘opening’ a window for them? All in all, I am all for the view of the need of subdivided for the poor as I believe it plays a crucial role to let them find a home that belongs to themselves. Also, to continually improve their life quality, lower prices and opening a window is necessary for landlords to enforce.
The recent article on subdivided
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in Hong Kong has stirred up heated controversies on weather or not it should exist. While
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a lot of
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people
strongly
against the appearance of subdivided
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houses
, saying that it is inhumane and
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makes
tenants’
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live
miserable, I
personally
support it as I believe that at least these
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houses
render
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people
a roof. Following I will
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stating
my reasons and provide several suggestions to
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landlords
for improving the
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life
quality of their tenants.

First
and foremost, subdivided
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unit
is a kind of special
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house
in Hong Kong, which is
extremely
narrow and can
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only
accommodate a bed
as well
as a container for belongings. In
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some
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peoples’
eyes, this is a terrible place and not suitable for human to
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live
,
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but
to those impoverished citizens, it is actually the last straw that can
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help
them. If there are no existence of subdivided
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houses
, the poor will
certainly
be more
seriously
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affected
. By virtue of expensive private
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house
, they may become homeless
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people
and
be forced
to sleep in McDonald’s at night or
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live
under flyover.
In contrast
, providing cheaper subdivided
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units
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improves
their
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life
a
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little bit
and at least gives them a place to avoid when disasters coming such as typhoon. A table can
be set
on bed, which
also
provide children with a space to finish homework after school. Aren’t subdivided
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units
necessary for them?

However
, although the
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price
of subdivided
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unit
is lower than private one,
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landlords
still
need to
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reduce
it in order to
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improve
tenants’
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life
. Hong Kong is
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a
international city with almost the highest
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price
level around the world, not
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only
on
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house
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but
also
on food, clothes and transportation.
As a result
, the sum of these number produces a massive pressure on a group of
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people
who have low income, which may cause mental diseases like depression, to name
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but
a few.
Therefore
, if a
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landlord
would like to assist those individual, one of the best methods is to adjust
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house
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price
to a suitable situation for both two sides. Since, it not
merely
decreases their pressure,
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but
can
also
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let
them spend more money on the other aspects of the
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life
and increase their quality of
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life
as well
.

Besides
, another action that
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landlords
can do is to promote living environment. Nowadays most of subdivided
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house
in Hong Kong are not safe
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enough
for citizens to
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live
.
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Some
of that do not equip with windows, which
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make
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people
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fresh air or
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see
sunlight.
Consequently
, the more and more psychological problems will
be produced
in this enclosed space.
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So
why don’t
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landlords
‘opening’ a window for them?

All in all, I am all for the view of the need of subdivided for the poor as I believe it plays a crucial role to
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let
them find a home that belongs to themselves.
Also
, to
continually
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improve
their
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life
quality, lower
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prices
and opening a window is necessary for
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landlords
to enforce.
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IELTS essay The recent article on subdivided units in Hong Kong has stirred up heated controversies on weather or not it should exist.

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