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The reading states that altruistic behavior is an integral part of people s and animals lives However the lecturer suggests that we make a mistake when thinking that this behavior has no benefits

The reading states that altruistic behavior is an integral part of people s and animals lives However the lecturer suggests that we make a mistake when thinking that this behavior has no benefits 7aKP3
The reading and the lecture discuss the topic regarding altruism, and examples which provide human beings and animals in their real lives. The author believes that altruistic behavior is an integral part of people and group of animals dwelling and prepare several valuable examples. However, the speaker suggests that we make a mistake when think that this behavior is with zero benefits and show us examples with another side. First of all, the author claims that person and group of individuals are ready to share food and donate their body organs to another people for free. Moreover, the author appears that this behavior is unselfish act that belong to every member of society. The lecture rebuts this argument suggesting that donors do not receive any appreciation after organs donations because they do not recognize this fact. Secondly, the article notes that many species of animals have altruistic behavior and provide us with example when one representative of meerkat can be a custodian for other meerkats when they hunt or have food. Nevertheless, this point is challenged by the lecturer, and she says that this mammal from the previous example has already eaten before, he has full stomach, and we cannot use this example. The third aspect of the debate is the meerkat behavior. Does he guard other meerkats from predators or do something else? The article, on the one hand, establishes that the meerkat is a sentinel and caretaker when other animals try to eat food. The professor, on the other hand, posits that this meerkat has an excellent opportunity to save his life because he is on the edge and could see dangerous situation the first and go away and find a shelter.
The reading and the lecture discuss the topic regarding altruism, and
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which provide human beings and
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animals
in their real
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lives
. The author believes that altruistic
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behavior
is an integral part of
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people
and group of
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animals
dwelling and prepare several valuable
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examples
.
However
, the speaker suggests that we
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make
a mistake when
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think
that this
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behavior
is with zero benefits and
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show
us
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with another side.

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, the author claims that person and group of individuals are ready to share food and donate their body organs to another
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people
for free.
Moreover
, the author appears that this
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behavior
is unselfish act that belong to every member of society. The lecture rebuts this argument suggesting that donors do not receive any appreciation after organs donations
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because
they do not recognize this fact.

Secondly
, the article notes that
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many
species of
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animals
have altruistic
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behavior
and provide us with
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example
when one representative of
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meerkat
can be a custodian for
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other
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meerkats
when they hunt or have food.
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, this point
is challenged
by the lecturer, and she says that this mammal from the previous
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example
has already eaten
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before
, he has full stomach, and we cannot
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use
this example.

The third aspect of the debate is the
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meerkat
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behavior
. Does he guard
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other
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meerkats
from predators or do something else? The article, on the one hand, establishes that the
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meerkat
is a sentinel and caretaker when
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other
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animals
try to eat food. The professor, on the
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other
hand, posits that this
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meerkat
has an excellent opportunity to save his life
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because
he is on the edge and could
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see
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dangerous
situation the
first
and go away and find a shelter.
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IELTS essay The reading states that altruistic behavior is an integral part of people s and animals lives However the lecturer suggests that we make a mistake when thinking that this behavior has no benefits

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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