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The reading passage provides three reasons to support the claim that the copper cylinder found in the clay jars discovered in Iraq were not used as electric batteries.

The reading passage provides three reasons to support the claim that the copper cylinder found in the clay jars discovered in Iraq were not used as electric batteries. BJQl9
The reading passage provides three reasons to support the claim that the copper cylinder found in the clay jars discovered in Iraq were not used as electric batteries. However, the professor believes that all the arguments mentioned in the reading are unconvincing and the fact that they are used for electricity can be correct. To begin with, the article implies that there are no metal wires found near the vessels which indicate that they are not batteries. On the other hand, the professor points out that the people who discovered these vessels were local people, not archeologists, and they are not well trained. They might found other objects like wires or conductors, but they are not interested in them and threw them away. Secondly, the author posits that there is a similarity between these cylinders and other copper cylinders found in the ruins of Seleucia, which is used for holding scrolls of sacred texts. This indicates that they are used the same way. The professor, in contrast, explains that it is true that they are similar but this is not a proof that the copper cylinder found in Iraq were not used as batteries. He mentions that these cylinders may be originally designed for this purpose but later someone discovered that it may be used as batteries. This may be an invention of the first battery. Finally, the reading contends that there were no devices that needed electricity during the ancient period so having batteries were unuseful. The professor opposes this point by explaining that there might be other uses for batteries like using them for mild shock or tingled sensation. He states that some people mi=ay use them for magical purposes. In addition, he points out that in modern medicine, they use a mild electric current to stimulate muscles and reduce pains and aches so ancient doctors might use them the same way.
The reading passage provides three reasons to support the claim that the copper
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cylinder
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found
in the clay jars discovered in Iraq were not
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used
as electric batteries.
However
, the
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professor
believes that all the arguments mentioned in the reading are unconvincing and the fact that they are
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used
for electricity can be correct.

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begin
with, the article implies that there are no metal wires
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found
near the vessels which indicate that they are not batteries. On the
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other
hand, the
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professor
points out that the
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people
who discovered these vessels were local
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people
, not archeologists, and they are not
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well trained
. They might
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found
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other
objects like wires or conductors,
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but
they are not interested in them and threw them away.

Secondly
, the author posits that there is a similarity between these
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cylinders
and
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other
copper
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cylinders
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found
in the ruins of
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Seleucia
, which is
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used
for holding scrolls of sacred texts. This indicates that they are
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used
the same way. The
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professor
,
in contrast
,
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explains
that it is true that they are similar
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but
this is not a proof that the copper
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cylinder
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found
in Iraq were not
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used
as batteries. He mentions that these
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cylinders
may be
originally
designed for this purpose
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but
later someone discovered that it may be
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used
as batteries. This may be an invention of the
first
battery.

Finally
, the reading contends that there were no devices that needed electricity during the ancient period
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so
having batteries were unuseful. The
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professor
opposes this point by explaining that there might be
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other
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uses
for batteries like using them for mild shock or tingled sensation. He states that
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some
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people
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ay
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use
them for magical purposes.
In addition
, he points out that in modern medicine, they
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use
a mild electric
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current
to stimulate muscles and
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reduce
pains and aches
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so
ancient doctors might
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use
them the same way.

IELTS essay The reading passage provides three reasons to support the claim that the copper cylinder found in the clay jars discovered in Iraq were not used as electric batteries.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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