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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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Online shopping has become an integral part of our society. While some people believe that online shopping would dominate the future market and completely replace the shops in towns and cities, I think that online and offline shopping would coexist. This essay would explain why physical shopping in towns and cities is essential and irreplaceable. There are many advantages of shopping in towns and cities, and an important one is that, unlike online shopping, shopping with friends and family in a mall is considered a leisure and relaxation activity. It is because the shopping experience you get in showrooms/ shops is priceless and it becomes more worth when your close friends or relatives with common interest accompanies you. For example, generally, on weekends, one of my favourite weekend getaways is to shop for electronic gadgets and dine in a nearby mall with my friends to curb the boredom in my day to day life. In contrast to this, online shopping is advantageous during busy days as it can save a lot of time and effort. Moreover, another vital point to consider is that items like clothes, shoes, sports fittings, personal protective equipment, Etc. , are difficult to buy online. As these items' choice hugely depends on proper fitting and even same sizes from different brands may fit differently. For instance, last year, I ordered a leather shoe from a particular brand online, which I had to cancel eventually after five swaps for different models and sizes as none of them fit me perfectly, and due to this, I ultimately wasted more time and effort as compared to procuring it from a shop in my city. Nevertheless, some items like mobile phones, computers etc. are preferred to be purchased online, as these channels give huge discounts and offer a vast majority of choices compared to a local shop. To sum up, online shopping is a preferred option during busy days, and for some items but it is not practical for the things which require proper fitting, and on top of that the experience of visiting the physical shops is invaluable, so the shops in towns and cities would always coexist with online shopping.
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has become an integral part of our society. While
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some
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people
believe that
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online
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would dominate the future market and completely replace the
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shops
in
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towns
and
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, I
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that
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online
and offline
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would coexist. This essay would
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why physical
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in
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towns
and
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cities
is essential and irreplaceable.

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advantages of
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in
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towns
and
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cities
, and an
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important
one is that, unlike
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online
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,
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shopping
with friends and family in a mall
is considered
a leisure and relaxation activity. It is
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because
the
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experience you
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get
in showrooms/
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shops
is priceless and it becomes more worth when your close friends or relatives with common interest accompanies you.
For example
,
generally
, on weekends, one of my
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favourite
weekend getaways is to
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for electronic gadgets and dine in a nearby mall with my friends to curb the boredom in my
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day to day
life.
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to this,
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online
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is advantageous during busy days as it can save
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a lot of
time and effort.

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, another vital point to consider is that items like clothes, shoes, sports fittings, personal protective equipment, Etc.
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,
are difficult to
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. As these items' choice
hugely
depends on proper fitting and even same sizes from
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different
brands may fit
differently
.
For instance
, last year, I ordered a leather shoe from a particular brand
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online
, which I had to cancel
eventually
after five swaps for
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different
models and sizes as none of them fit me
perfectly
, and due to this, I
ultimately
wasted more time and effort as compared to procuring it from a
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shop
in my city.
Nevertheless
,
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some
items like mobile phones, computers etc.
are preferred
to be
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purchased
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online
, as these channels give huge discounts and offer a vast majority of choices compared to a local shop.

To sum up,
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online
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is a preferred option during busy days, and for
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some
items
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it is not practical for the things which require proper fitting, and
on top of that
the experience of visiting the physical
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shops
is invaluable,
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so
the
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in
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towns
and
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cities
would always coexist with
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online
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shopping
.
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IELTS essay The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
362 words
6.0
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