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Studies show that criminals get low level of education. Some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is educating people in prison so they can get a job after leaving prison. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Studies show that criminals get low level of education. Some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is educating people in prison so they can get a job after leaving prison. v. 3 KD91
Research has proven that lawbreaker receives a small degree of education. Many hold the opinion that the most suitable way to lower criminal offences is by teaching those in jail the skills they need to acquire employment after their release. I agree with this notion to a certain extent. Firstly, many people are sent to prison due to crimes such as theft and joining gangs that participate in illegal activities. This is because they did not graduate from school, let alone college, to obtain the tools that they need to make money in an honest way. For instance, 2019 Statistics obtained from prison research revealed that 80% of criminal offences are committed by uneducated individuals who have no other options to put food on their tables except by committing these acts. Therefore, educating these delinquent's during the time that they spent locked up, paves the way for them to receive income without breaking the law. Overall, this leads to a reduction in illegal activities. However, let us not ignore the fact that some lawbreaker is well educated. Which means that a lack of education does not drive the acts they commit, in fact, they are driven by hate. Although they have spent time in prison for their acts, their mentality remains the same, especially if they are part of a cult. In these situations, no amount of knowledge can prevent them from repeating their offences again. For example, people who are part of racist organizations like the KKK, will continue to kill black humans as they believe they are entitled to their cause. Undoubtedly, the application of teaching schemes in prisons will not uplift the burden of their crimes once their jail time is up. In conclusion, despite the many wrongdoer's that would refrain from criminal acts, once they are released from captivity, if they were to be taught important working skills, some already posses these skills and continue to cause havoc. Research has proven that lawbreaker receives a tiny degree of education. numerous hold the opinion that the most suitable way to lower criminal offenses is by teaching those in jail the skills they need to acquire employment after their release. I agree with this notion to a certain extent. Firstly, a plethora of people are sent to prison due to crimes such as theft and joining gangs that participate in illegal activities. This is due to the fact they did not graduate from school, let alone college, to obtain the tools that they need to make money in an honest way. For instance, 2019 Statistics obtained from prison research revealed that 80% of criminal offenses are committed by uneducated individuals who have no other options to put food on their tables except by committing these acts. Therefore, educating these delinquents during the time that they spent locked up, paves the way for them to receive income without breaking the law. Overall, this leads to a reduction in illegal activities. However, let us not ignore the fact that some lawbreaker is well-educated. Which means that a lack of education does not drive the acts they commit, in fact, they are driven by hate. Although they have spent time in prison for their acts, their mentality remains the same, especially if they are part of a cult. In these situations, no amount of knowledge can prevent them from repeating their offenses again. For example, people who are part of racist organizations like the KKK, will continue to kill black humans as they believe they are entitled to their cause. Undoubtedly, the application of teaching schemes in Prisons will not uplift the burden of their crimes once their jail time is up. In conclusion, Although despite a number of wrongdoers that would refrain from criminal acts, once they are released from captivity, if they were to be taught essential working skills, some already posses these skills and continue to cause havoc.
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small
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education
.
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Many
hold the opinion that the most suitable way to lower
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criminal
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teaching
those in
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jail
the
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skills
they
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need
to acquire employment after their release. I
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agree
with this notion to a certain extent.
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,
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many
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people
are
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sent
to
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prison
due to
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crimes
such as theft and joining gangs that participate in
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illegal
activities. This is
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because
they did not graduate from school,
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let
alone college, to obtain the tools that they
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need
to
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make
money
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in an honest way
.
For instance
, 2019 Statistics obtained from
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prison
research revealed that 80% of
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criminal
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offences
are committed
by uneducated individuals
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who
have no other options to put food on their tables except by committing these
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acts
.
Therefore
, educating these
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delinquent's
during the
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time
that they
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spent
locked up, paves the way for them to
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receive
income without breaking the law.
Overall
, this leads to a reduction in
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illegal
activities.
However
,
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let
us not
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the
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lawbreaker
is
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well educated
. Which means that a lack of
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education
does not drive the
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acts
they commit, in
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fact
, they
are driven
by hate. Although they have
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spent
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time
in
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prison
for their
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acts
, their mentality remains the same,
especially
if they are
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part
of a cult. In these situations, no amount of knowledge can
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prevent
them from repeating their
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offences
again.
For example
,
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people
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who
are
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part
of racist organizations like the KKK, will
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continue
to kill black humans as they believe they
are entitled
to their
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cause
.
Undoubtedly
, the application of
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teaching
schemes in
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prisons
will not uplift the burden of their
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crimes
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once
their
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jail
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time
is up.
In conclusion
, despite the
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many
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wrongdoer's
that would refrain from
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criminal
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acts
,
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once
they
are released
from captivity, if they were to
be taught
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important
working
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skills
,
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some
already posses these
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skills
and
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continue
to
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cause
havoc.

Research has proven that
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lawbreaker
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receives
a tiny degree of
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education
.
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numerous
hold the opinion that the most suitable way to lower
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criminal
offenses is by
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teaching
those in
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jail
the
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skills
they
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need
to acquire employment after their release. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this notion to a certain extent.

Firstly
, a plethora of
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people
are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prison
due to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crimes
such as theft and joining gangs that participate in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
illegal
activities. This is due to the
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fact
they did not graduate from school,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
alone college, to obtain the tools that they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
need
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
money
Consider replacing "in an honest way" with the adverb for "honest"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an honest way
.
For instance
, 2019 Statistics obtained from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prison
research revealed that 80% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
criminal
offenses
are committed
by uneducated individuals
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
have no other options to put food on their tables except by committing these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
acts
.
Therefore
, educating these delinquents during the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
that they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spent
locked up, paves the way for them to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
receive
income without breaking the law.
Overall
, this leads to a reduction in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
illegal
activities.

However
,
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let
us not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignore
the
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fact
that
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some
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lawbreaker
is well-educated. Which means that a lack of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
does not drive the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
acts
they commit, in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fact
, they
are driven
by hate. Although they have
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prison
for their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
acts
, their mentality remains the same,
especially
if they are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
part
of a cult. In these situations, no amount of knowledge can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
them from repeating their offenses again.
For example
,
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people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
part
of racist organizations like the KKK, will
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
continue
to kill black humans as they believe they
are entitled
to their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cause
.
Undoubtedly
, the application of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
schemes in

Prisons will not uplift the burden of their
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crimes
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
once
their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jail
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
is up.

In conclusion
, Although despite a number of wrongdoers that would refrain from
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criminal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
acts
,
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once
they
are released
from captivity, if they were to
be taught
essential working
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
already posses these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
and
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continue
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cause
havoc.
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IELTS essay Studies show that criminals get low level of education. Some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is educating people in prison so they can get a job after leaving prison. v. 3

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
650 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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