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some people who failed at school can be highly successful in their adult life. Discuss why does thsi happen ? and what are the main factors to get a succesful life?

It is often seen that students who are not brilliant at school level becomes successful in their later life. There can be many reasons which add to their failure. This essay will discuss firstly discuss the causes of the failures and later will state the factors for success. At young age children does not know on what to focus and what to leave so their thoughts gets distrupted with many views in normal words there is lack of focus at this age. For example students tries to do lot of classes in a day
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that students who are not brilliant at school level becomes successful in their later life. There can be
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reasons which
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to their failure. This essay will discuss
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discuss the causes of the failures and later will state the factors for success. At young age children does not know on what to focus and what to
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leave
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their thoughts
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distrupted
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views in normal words there is lack of focus at this age.
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students
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tries
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lot of
classes in a
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day
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IELTS essay some people who failed at school can be highly successful in their adult life. Discuss why does thsi happen? and what are the main factors to get a succesful life?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
93 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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