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some people think that the government i s wasting money on arts and that this money could better be spent elsewhere. To what extents do you agree with this view? v.1

some people think that the government i s wasting money on arts and that this money could better be spent elsewhere. v. 1
Culture and traditions are one of the most essential views these days. There has been a lot of debates that government is lavishing resources on traditional and cultural arts. In this writing will be talking about how supporting culture and its components can bring about development to the nation in terms of foreign exchange, historical background awareness and also attracts tourist into the country. Firstly, embracing the roots gives us an opportunity to be able to tell a story to the oncoming generation about their lineage and tradition that is being practiced so as to facilitate embrace their livelihood and also in appreciation of our forefathers, for instance, the freedom story of every community should be passed on to the generations to come. Artefacts, images, are proofs and in appreciation of our heroes past that has fought for the independence of our nation(s). Secondly, artefacts that show the history are kept in the museum, which brings people from all over the continents to come visiting, that is, arts is another form of attraction to tourist and researchers to learn about the culture of other countries and by so doing, it exposes such countries and community to the international scenes. Slave trade business in Africa back in the years still brings people to come check out how people were being treated and where slaves were being kept is still in existence till today in Lagos(Nigeria) which also generates a form of revenue for the government and the nation. Development in the arts increases foreign exchange in terms of cash flow into the region. As people come to buy the items with their currencies, they pay tax on the goods bought and export due charges which all goes to the government pocket to better the standard of living in the society. In conclusion, allocation of resources to improve arts and culture brings lots of advantages to individuals and also benefits the country as a whole.
Culture
and traditions are one of the most essential views these days. There has been
a lot of
debates that
government
is lavishing resources on traditional and cultural
arts
. In this writing will be talking about how supporting
culture
and its components can
bring
about development to the nation in terms of foreign exchange, historical background awareness and
also
attracts tourist into the country.

Firstly
, embracing the roots gives us an opportunity to be able to
tell
a story to the oncoming generation about their lineage and tradition
that is
being practiced
so as to
facilitate embrace their livelihood and
also
in appreciation of our forefathers,
for instance
, the freedom story of every community should
be passed
on to the generations to
come
.
Artefacts
, images, are proofs and in appreciation of our heroes past that has fought for the independence of our nation(s).

Secondly
,
artefacts
that
show
the history are
kept
in the museum, which
brings
people
from all over the continents to
come
visiting,
that is
,
arts
is another form of attraction to tourist and researchers to learn about the
culture
of other countries and by
so
doing, it exposes such countries and community to the international scenes. Slave trade business in Africa back in the years
still
brings
people
to
come
check
out how
people
were
being treated
and where slaves were being
kept
is
still
in existence till
today
in Lagos(Nigeria) which
also
generates a form of revenue for the
government
and the nation.

Development in the
arts
increases foreign exchange in terms of cash flow into the region. As
people
come
to
buy
the items with their currencies, they pay tax on the
goods
bought
and export due charges which all goes to the
government
pocket to better the standard of living in the society.

In conclusion
, allocation of resources to
improve
arts
and
culture
brings
lots of advantages to individuals and
also
benefits the country as a whole.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay some people think that the government i s wasting money on arts and that this money could better be spent elsewhere. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
323 words
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