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Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that these are necessary for individuals and the society. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.11

Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that these are necessary for individuals and the society. v. 11 QOAX

In today's world everyone want to throw grand parties and show lots of interests in organizing parties and it's just a waste of money but mostly people like to do parties to celebrate their victories. In weddings many people use their money unnecessarily just for showing of their image instead of doing this people must have donate some money to good causes where the needy one can get good education while planning some grand events people must consider all the factors. While Celebrating their special occasions they must consider each and every aspect of their doing. It is also necessary to invite people in weddings, birthday celebrations because everyone get married once in a life and everyone born in once in a life so that us also important to celebrate their special day. However while celebrating this special moment of their life they must have consider each and every thing. In this conclusion everyone must celebrate every occasion according to their needs.

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today
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everyone
The pronoun 'everyone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "wants", "wanted".wantswanted
want
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show
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just
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but
mostly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 like to do parties to celebrate their victories. In weddings This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 their money unnecessarily
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 for showing of their image instead
 of doing this You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
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donate
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some
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good
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get
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good
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some
 grand This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :occasionshappenings
events
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
 consider all the factors. While Celebrating their special occasions they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
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people
 in weddings, birthday celebrations This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
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everyone
The pronoun 'everyone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "gets", "got".getsgot
get
 married once in a life and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withanybodypeopleeverybody
everyone
 born in once in a life This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 that us also
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 to celebrate their special day. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?However,
However
 while celebrating this special moment of their life they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
 have Use past participle here: "considered".considered
consider
 each and every thing. In this conclusion You use this word too often, consider replacing it withanybodypeopleeverybody
everyone
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
 celebrate every occasion according to their needs. 