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Some people think that products should be made to last as long as possible, while others think making the products cheap is more important. Discuss both views and express your own opinion

Some people think that products should be made to last as long as possible, while others think making the products cheap is more important. Discuss both views and express your own opinion oB2V
When buying a product, most people weigh up price versus quality. While some feel that durability should be the main priority, others argue that affordability is more important. In this essay, I will examine both views and explain why I feel that companies and customers need to make responsible decisions. Those who prioritise quality argue that if products lasted longer, waste could be reduced. Indeed, it is obvious that as products have become almost disposable, the amount of landfill is growing. Most people, for instance, buy a new phone every two to three years regardless of need. This throw-away mentality drives more production which also contributes to environmental damage through raw material extraction, factory emissions, transportation and packaging. If we only bought one mobile phone per decade instead, we could dramatically reduce this impact. For others, lower prices are more important than this quality. Indeed, compared to fifty years ago, the range of products on the market is bigger and the prices are much more affordable. A computer, for example, used to cost several thousand dollars, but now it is possible to buy one for under $300. This means that more people have access to such items, which means greater equality and opportunity, particularly when it comes to products such as cars and electronics. Personally, I feel the best way forward is for both businesses and consumers to think carefully about their choices. For companies, consideration must be given to sustainable and ethical practices. Rather than producing a range of poorly made cheap clothing that will not last more than a season, it would be better to invest a little more in quality materials and workmanship. That said, it is then up to the consumer to reward those companies that step up. They too should seek out companies that demonstrate best practice rather than simply opt for the lowest price. In conclusion, the battle between quality and affordability is always going to exist. In order to strike a balance that minimises environmental impact and allows all people access to products, corporations and individuals need to use their judgement
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, most
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weigh up price versus quality.

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feel that durability should be the main priority, others argue

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that
affordability is more
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important
. In this essay, I will examine
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both


views and
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why I feel that
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companies
and customers need to

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make
responsible decisions.

Those who
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prioritise
quality argue that if
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products
lasted longer, waste

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could
be
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reduced
.
Indeed
, it is obvious that as
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products
have become

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almost
disposable, the amount of landfill is growing. Most
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people
,
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for


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instance
,
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buy
a new phone every two to three years regardless of need.

This throw-away mentality drives more production which
also
contributes

to environmental damage through raw material extraction, factory

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emissions
, transportation and packaging. If we
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only
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bought
one
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mobile


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phone
per decade
instead
, we could
dramatically
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reduce
this impact.

For others, lower prices are more
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important
than this quality.
Indeed
,

compared to fifty years ago, the range of
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products
on the market is

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bigger
and the prices are much more affordable. A computer,
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for


example,
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used
to cost several thousand dollars,
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but
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now
it is possible to

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buy
one for under $300. This means that more
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people
have access
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to


such items, which means greater equality and opportunity,
particularly


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when
it
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comes
to
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products
such as cars and electronics.

Personally
, I feel the best way forward is for both businesses and

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consumers
to
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think
carefully
about their choices. For
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companies
,

consideration
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must
be
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given
to sustainable and ethical practices.
Rather


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than
producing a range of
poorly
made
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cheap
clothing that will not last

more than a season, it would be better to invest a
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little
more in quality

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materials
and workmanship. That said, it is then up to the consumer
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to


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reward
those
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companies
that step up. They too should seek
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out


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companies
that
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demonstrate best
practice
rather
than
simply
opt for the

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lowest
price.

In conclusion
, the battle between quality and affordability is always going

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to
exist. In order to strike a balance that
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minimises
environmental
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impact


and
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allows
all
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people
access to
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products
, corporations and individuals

need to
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use
their judgement
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IELTS essay Some people think that products should be made to last as long as possible, while others think making the products cheap is more important. Discuss both views and express your own opinion

Essay
  American English
33 paragraphs
347 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
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