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Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.3

Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. 3
It is thought by some that parents should have the responsibility to teach their offspring how to become a good citizen, others, however, argue that the best place where young can learn this is at school. In this essay, I will discuss why I believe that parents are the most suitable in guiding children to be a good person, followed by a reasoned conclusion. On the one hand, children spend most of their time at school on a daily basis, therefore it is widely believed that the school ought to provide them with a good learning environment. Educational institutions should not only educate children with subjects like science, mathematics, and literature, but most also instill young educators on becoming decent citizens by teaching them to develop all the good behaviors. For example, they can be taught the importance of discipline, teamwork, and punctuality. However, I believe this method is impractical because young adults might not cooperate with teachers and could disobey their advice On the other hand, I believe that it will be more efficient and effective for the parents to teach their own children because of the amount of time they spent together especially during weekends and summer holidays. That is to say, parents should take advantages of these ample time to explain to them how important is of having good morality and proper attitudes towards others. For instance, a recent survey shows that 80% of children listen to their mothers’ advice. In conclusion, I do not agree that school is the best place to demonstrate adolescents on how to be a good fellow citizen, it is the responsibility of parents to take this lead in teaching their own children.
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school
. In this essay, I will discuss why I believe that
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to be a
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good
person, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

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children
spend most of their time at
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school
on a daily basis,
therefore
it is
widely
believed that the
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school
ought to provide them with a
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good
learning environment. Educational institutions should not
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educate
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children
with subjects like science, mathematics, and literature,
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but
most
also
instill young educators on becoming decent citizens by teaching them to develop all the
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good
behaviors.
For example
, they can
be taught
the importance of discipline, teamwork, and punctuality.
However
, I believe this method is impractical
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because
young adults might not cooperate with teachers and could disobey their advice

On the other hand
, I believe that it will be more efficient and effective for the
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parents
to teach their
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own
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children
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because
of the amount of time they spent together
especially
during weekends and summer holidays.
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to say,
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parents
should take advantages of these ample time to
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explain
to them how
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important
is of having
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good
morality and proper attitudes towards others.
For instance
, a recent survey
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shows
that 80% of
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children
listen to their mothers’ advice.

In conclusion
, I do not
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agree
that
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school
is the best place to demonstrate adolescents on how to be a
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good
fellow citizen, it is the responsibility of
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parents
to take this lead in teaching their
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own
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children
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS essay Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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