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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of the society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.9

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of the society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 9
These days, parents would be teaching kids when there is a good position of members of society. What is the most effective method with dealing in primary schools is the best way and location to learn many things for asking about doubts? Some people say that every child will go outside the world and meet at different a valuable person from gaining knowledge. In this essay, I will support my opinion with examples. First and foremost, Infants should be required to change the world for able mother and father. There are involving various types of activities around the place. To increase the ability of skills of turning people's mindset of doing business. For example, Club is running in the Sunday afternoon because, like books, reading of tests, playing games for different usage of living, Sharing of ideas to keep the company plenty of opportunities. It depends upon the mindset for thinking ability in their career, but sometimes mother wants to tell a kid for a little bit of improvement. Secondly, Any school had been significant to gain knowledge. Some events were conducted with college or university also secondary education. This can't be running throughout a year, but a lack of funding in their education system. For Instance, Top most high schools are providing free of education in my country, but also the highest percentage of academics. There will be learning free of the cost of the institution, whereas other benefits for students while studying at the institution. In a nutshell, although it is a common belief that parents and schools are required to learn in the public also.
These days, parents would be teaching kids when there is a
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position of members of society. What is the most effective method with dealing in primary
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schools
is the best way and location to learn
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many
things for asking about doubts?
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Some
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people
say that every child will go outside the world and
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meet
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a valuable person from gaining knowledge. In this essay, I will support my opinion with examples.

First
and foremost, Infants should
be required
to
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change
the world for able mother and father. There
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are involving
various types of activities around the place. To increase the ability of
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skills
of turning
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people
's mindset of doing business.
For example
, Club is running in the Sunday afternoon
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because
, like books, reading of
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tests
, playing games for
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different
usage of living, Sharing of
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ideas
to
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keep
the
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company
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plenty
of opportunities. It depends upon the mindset for thinking ability in their career,
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but
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sometimes
mother wants to
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tell
a kid for a
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little bit
of improvement.

Secondly
, Any
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school
had been significant to gain knowledge.
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Some
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events
were conducted
with college or university
also
secondary education. This can't be running throughout a year,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
a lack of funding in their education system.
For Instance
, Top most high
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
are providing free of education in my country,
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but
also
the highest percentage of academics. There will be learning free of the cost of the institution, whereas other benefits for students while studying at the institution.

In a nutshell, although it is a common belief that parents and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
are required
to learn in the public
also
.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of the society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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