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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. wAO3
Child's future depends on the foundation in youth which has been given to him from his parents and teachers. Numerous people argue that, for growing as a good members of society, parents will be in the main role in their children's life, while others say that as child spends most of part their time at school they gain an essential skills for life from their teachers. In this essay both of the opinions will be discussed with giving some relevant examples for this. On the one hand, parents are the first teachers and home is the first school where children learn about life lessons. Educating children about love, empathy, kindness and socially acceptable skills must be thought them from their childhood. According to the Child Specialist Doctors, an important period of learning skills for a child is up to 7 years. Most of the children mimic their parents actions, while they don't know how to act in the different situations. That's why, since child is at home parents would be responsible for them and they have a grater role setting good examples for their kids. On the other hand, many believe that school plays a golden role in children life. When children gain education and various skills in school, it will help them in the future to become self-dependent. This will also empower abilities of local community. For instance, when they well educated at school, they might become a good teacher or any kind of person who will share experience and knowledge also with others and community can benefit from this also. To sum up, in my humble opinion, despite everything, parents would be a good teacher for their kid, while they are too young to understand what is good or bad for them.
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parents
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teachers
. Numerous
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people
argue that, for growing as a
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good
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members
of society,
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parents
will be in the main role in their children's
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life
, while others say that as
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child
spends
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most of part
their time at
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school
they gain an essential
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skills
for
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life
from their
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teachers
. In this essay both of the opinions will
be discussed
with giving
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some
relevant examples for this. On the one hand,
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parents
are the
first
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teachers
and home is the
first
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school
where
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children
learn about
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life
lessons. Educating
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children
about
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love
, empathy, kindness and
socially
acceptable
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skills
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must
be
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thought
them from their childhood. According to the
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Child
Specialist Doctors, an
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important
period of learning
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skills
for a
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child
is up to 7 years. Most of the
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children
mimic their
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parents
actions, while they don't know how to act in the
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different
situations. That's why, since
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child
is at home
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parents
would be responsible for
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them and
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good
examples for their kids.
On the other hand
,
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believe that
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plays a golden role in
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children
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. When
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children
gain education and various
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skills
in
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school
, it will
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help
them in the future to become self-dependent. This will
also
empower abilities of local community.
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well educated
at
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school
, they might become a
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good
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teacher
or any kind of person who will share experience and knowledge
also
with others and community can benefit from this
also
. To sum up, in my humble opinion, despite everything,
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parents
would be a
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good
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teacher
for their kid, while they are too young to understand what is
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good
or
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bad
for them.
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IELTS essay Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
294 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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