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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.41

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. v. 41
Considering home a better place to guide kids, the moral values of civilization is an opinion of certain people, while Majority favour school. This essay will discuss both sides of argument and present evidence about why parents can teach manners effectively. The key benefit that home is the best place to learn etiquettes are availability of environment. This is because family remains in touch with kids more time and monitors every activity along with guides them accordingly; however, the student feels comfortable with their family and listens to them effectively, therefore, if any kid says or react in an unethical way at any time, parents will teach them immediately and give relevant assistance. Considering children in a home in India, for instance. They spend most of their time at home with their family excluding few hours which are invested in school. Consequently, the maximum monitoring of children prevents them from acting or repetition of an ethical word. Furthermore, the School also plays the major role for pupils in providing exposure to society. This is because teacher guides them the proper rules about ethics along with allow entertaining with good students in class as well as in different social activities so that they could learn and practice with them through communication. Similarly, it helps tutors to test them and react, whenever any kid makes use of any irrelevant behaviour or talks any unusual word. Taking pupils in a school in India, for example, a kid remains in contact with other children and gets encouraged, when everyone speaks in a well-mannered. Hence, schools create a path for students to learn and restrict them from usage of any unethical word behaviour through exposure to public. Conclusion; Both Home and School have their own ways and benefits, but the Parents can provide better guidance owing to their time and familiarities. I am convinced that Family leads a kid towards a better understanding of the environment and ethics of society.
Considering home a better place to guide
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kids
, the moral values of civilization is an opinion of certain
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people
, while Majority
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favour
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school
. This essay will discuss both sides of argument and present evidence about why parents can teach manners
effectively
.

The key benefit that home is the best place to learn
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etiquettes
are availability of environment. This is
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because
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family
remains in touch with
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kids
more
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time
and monitors every activity along with guides them
accordingly
;
however
, the student feels comfortable with their
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family
and listens to them
effectively
,
therefore
, if any
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kid
says or react
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in an unethical way
at any
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time
, parents will teach them immediately and give relevant assistance. Considering children in a home in India,
for instance
. They spend most of their
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time
at home with their
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family
excluding few hours which
are invested
in
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school
.
Consequently
, the maximum monitoring of children
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prevents
them from acting or repetition of an ethical word.

Furthermore
, the
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School
also
plays the major role for pupils in providing exposure to society. This is
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because
teacher guides them the proper
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rules
about ethics along with
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allow
entertaining with
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good
students in
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class
as well
as in
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different
social activities
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so
that they could learn and practice with them through communication.
Similarly
, it
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helps
tutors to
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test
them and react, whenever any
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kid
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makes
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use
of any irrelevant
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behaviour
or talks any unusual word. Taking pupils in a
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school
in India,
for example
, a
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kid
remains in contact with other children and
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gets
encouraged, when everyone speaks in
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a well-mannered
.
Hence
,
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schools
create a path for students to learn and restrict them from usage of any unethical word
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behaviour
through exposure to public.

Conclusion; Both Home and
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School
have their
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own
ways and benefits,
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but
the Parents can provide better guidance owing to their
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time
and
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familiarities
. I
am convinced
that
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Family
leads a
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kid
towards a better understanding of the environment and ethics of society.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
One language sets you in a corridor for life. Two languages open every door along the way.
Frank Smith

IELTS essay Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. v. 41

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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