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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. other, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.21

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. other, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 21
One of the most controversial issues today relates to a lot of body believe that the father and mother responsible for discussing their children about how they become acceptable for their community. Remaining people think that depends on the school. So, in this essay I am going to examine this question from both points of view. On one side of the argument, there are people who argue that the benefits of education and caring the kids are the fundamental role for parents. Furthermore, the primary principles are existing for the sons and daughters. Also, it will concern and confirmation on it. Considerably outweigh its disadvantages. The main reason for believing this is that development, such as society and environments. Moreover, it will initiate from individual. It is also possible to say that, if the caring is an enormous task from home and parents. For instance, kids making ready they will be discriminating members. One good illustration of this is that, when the children going for school for example, they will learn extra data and achieve more cultures. On the other hand, it is possible to make the opposing case. It is often argued that in fact if parents are not live. So, in this status consider first cons. People often have this opinion, perhaps because the children live a far from own family. A second point is that depending on the institution learning for becoming acceptable to their society. For example, possibly children have online teaching after that, they cannot learn by body contacts and cannot obtain the unique teaching. A particularly good example here is if you are living in countries that suffering from wars and unstable, you can not go to the facility every day. To sum up, as we have seen, there are no easy answers to this question on balance. However, I tend to believe that the families are the first and final responsible for teaching and they have many options to product good members.
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today
relates to
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body believe that the father and mother responsible for discussing their
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children
about how they become acceptable for their community. Remaining
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people
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think
that depends on the school.
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So
, in this essay I am going to examine this question from both points of view.

On one side of the argument, there are
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people
who argue that the benefits of education and caring the kids are the fundamental role for parents.
Furthermore
, the primary principles are existing for the sons and daughters.
Also
, it will concern and confirmation on it.
Considerably
outweigh its disadvantages. The main reason for believing this is that development, such as society and environments.
Moreover
, it will initiate from individual. It is
also
possible to say that, if the caring is an enormous task from home and parents.
For instance
, kids making ready they will be discriminating members. One
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good
illustration of this is that, when the
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children
going for school
for example
, they will learn extra data and achieve more cultures.

On the other hand
, it is possible to
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make
the opposing case. It is
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often
argued that in fact if parents are not
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live
.
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first
cons.
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have this opinion, perhaps
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because
the
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children
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live
a far from
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own
family.

A second point is that depending on the institution learning for becoming acceptable to their society.
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,
possibly
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children
have online teaching after that, they cannot learn by body contacts and cannot obtain the unique teaching. A
particularly
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good
example here is if you are living in countries that suffering from wars and unstable, you can not go to the facility every day.

To sum up, as we have
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seen
, there are no easy answers to this question on balance.
However
, I tend to believe that the families are the
first
and final responsible for
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teaching and
they have
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many
options to product
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good
members.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. other, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 21

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
329 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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