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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.18

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 18
These days, the number of crime that happens by young individuals are rising, which most of them back into the wrong upbringing methods adopted through parents. Teaching to parents is one of the ways that have a significant and undeniable role in the resolve of this issue. In this essay, I want to argue that how parenting awareness training can contribute to the falling crime rate. Firstly, it is intuitively obvious that having information about crime figures by mothers and fathers have a special influence on the nurture of children and teen in a household to be aware of offenses. The older should brush up awareness and skills of illegal acts and its punishment, and after that transfer them to youngers. It not only helps them to understand the existing laws, but they can also control their unlawful activities. For example, parents should be aware of violent conducts and its punishing, then teach to immature people about them to prevent crime. secondly, enhancing parenting skills in terms of control crime rate is an overt way to fight crimes. Since fathers and mothers are the core trainer of the young people in society they should have sufficient info-social skills to be able to manage their children. Experience has shown that parents who have been taught the right technique of coping with such problems are more successful than ones who use other techniques such as trial and error. In conclusion, as we know, prevention is better than remedy. Cutting the level of crime by parenting skills is a kind of prevent before it occurs. Indeed, parenting abilities have a markable role in the deterrent from committing a crime by younger people.
These days, the number of
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crime
that happens by young individuals are rising, which most of them back into the
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wrong
upbringing methods adopted through
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parents
. Teaching to
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parents
is one of the ways that have a significant and undeniable role in the resolve of this issue. In this essay, I want to argue that how
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parenting
awareness training can contribute to the falling
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crime
rate.

Firstly
, it is
intuitively
obvious that having information about
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crime
figures by mothers and fathers have a special influence on the nurture of children and teen in a household to be aware of offenses. The older should brush up awareness and
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skills
of illegal acts and its punishment, and after that transfer them to
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. It not
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only
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helps
them to understand the existing laws,
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but
they can
also
control their unlawful activities.
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,
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parents
should be aware of violent conducts and its punishing, then teach to immature
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people
about them to
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prevent
crime.

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secondly
, enhancing
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parenting
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skills
in terms of control
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crime
rate is an overt way to fight
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crimes
. Since fathers and mothers are the core trainer of the young
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people
in society they should have sufficient info-social
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skills
to be able to manage their children. Experience has shown that
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parents
who have
been taught
the right technique of coping with such problems are more successful than ones who
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use
other techniques such as trial and error.

In conclusion
, as we know, prevention is better than remedy. Cutting the level of
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crime
by
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parenting
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skills
is a kind of
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prevent
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before
it occurs.
Indeed
,
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parenting
abilities have a
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markable
role in the deterrent from committing a
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crime
by younger
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people
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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