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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 1
Nowadays, children are being taught to be better memeber of society. While some people contend that parents should teach their children to be good, others deem that it is the role of school. In this essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion. Teaching a child to be better member in school has advantages. Firstly, teachers can help a student to socialize with friends. This is becaues school is a learning place, and it contains many different students from various backgound. For example, a school houses wider range of people with whom students can interact, which helps to have better perception of good and bad. Secondly, a child gets understanding on how to be a good member of society in school. In other words, when students spend majority of their time in school, they get influenced by their surrounding, which often affects their understanding. However, learning in home to be helpful member of society also has its merits. First of all, it becomes easy for child to learn at home. This is due to the reason that children can easily express their feelings at home, which makes them comfortable. For instance, children often have easy time learning good habits with their family because they have a close relationship and no hesitation among each other. Also, behavior of a child is also the responsibility of parents. This happens because children are more likely to imitate their parents, so if parents are well-behaved, children may automatically become well-mannered. In conclusion, while learning in school may have benefits like socailizing easily and better understanding, teaching in home leads to comfortable environment and closeness with family. In my opinion, I think family should teach their child to be a better memeber of society.
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. While
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contend that
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parents
should teach their
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children
to be
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good
, others deem that it is the role of
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school
. In this essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion.

Teaching a
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child
to be
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better
member in
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school
has advantages.
Firstly
, teachers can
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help
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student
to socialize with friends. This is
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becaues
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school
is a
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learning
place, and it contains
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many
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different
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students
from various
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backgound
.
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, a
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school
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houses
wider range of
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people
with whom
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students
can interact, which
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helps
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perception of
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.
Secondly
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gets
understanding on how to be a
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member of
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in
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school
.
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students
spend
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majority of
their time in
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, they
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influenced by their surrounding, which
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affects their understanding.

However
,
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learning
in home to be helpful member of
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also
has its merits.
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, it becomes easy for
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child
to learn at home. This is due to the reason that
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children
can
easily
express their feelings at home, which
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makes
them comfortable.
For instance
,
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children
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often
have easy time
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learning
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good
habits with their family
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because
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Also
, behavior of a
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child
is
also
the responsibility of
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parents
. This happens
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are more likely to imitate their
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parents
,
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if
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parents
are well-behaved,
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may
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become well-mannered.

In conclusion
, while
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learning
in
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school
may have benefits like
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socailizing
easily
and
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better
understanding, teaching in home leads to comfortable environment and closeness with family. In my opinion, I
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think
family should teach their
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to be a
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better
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memeber
of
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society
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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