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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good in society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good in society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. v. 1
There are split opinions regarding the topic abound individuals think that totally parents responsibility to teach manners, how to be live good in society, while another group of thinkers support school is the best place to learn new things. this essay will highlight both the opinions and also elaborated that art certainly requires mastery over the fundamental of it and thus will lead to a logical conclusion. To start with, there are myriad of reasons which will further explain this argument, but the most preponderant on stems from the fact that the father and mother play a vital role in everyone's kid life. Therefore, they teach the manners to children because they have more intelligence about different topics. Furthermore, another pivotal aspect of this argument is that if juniors spend more time with guardian the ability, observe day by day as well as learn new skills and the children teach how to live in society with good manners. For example, ancestors should teach children what is the positive and negative point of things. If, they are told all things the children are aware what is good or bad things for themselves. Needless to say, all these merits stand in a good stead. However, the latter view suggests that an institution is the best place to learn new things. this is to express, the children meet as well as make new persons. So, they gain the ability and learn new culture or tradition, it is very beneficial for themselves. Besides this, the school is the best place to learn new things best many students study in school and teacher have more know-how as compared parents. Therefore, the easily teach the manners to children with face any problem. Hence, it is apparent why many are in favour this trend. In the nutshell, nevertheless, weighing the boot options, I believe that there is no single conclusion still, I take this ground the effective clap require use of both hands.
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are split
opinions regarding the topic abound individuals
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think
that
totally
parents responsibility to
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teach
manners, how to be
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live
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good
in society, while another group of thinkers
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support
school is the
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best
place to
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learn
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new
things.
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this
essay will highlight both the opinions and
also
elaborated that art
certainly
requires mastery over the fundamental of it and
thus
will lead to a logical conclusion.

To
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start
with, there are myriad of reasons which will
further
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explain
this argument,
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but
the most preponderant on stems from the fact that the father and mother play a vital role in everyone's kid life.
Therefore
, they
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teach
the manners to
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children
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because
they have more intelligence about
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different
topics.
Furthermore
, another pivotal aspect of this argument is that if juniors spend more time with guardian the ability, observe day by day
as well
as
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learn
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new
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skills
and the
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children
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teach
how to
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live
in society with
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good
manners.
For example
, ancestors should
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teach
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children
what is the
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positive
and
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negative
point of things. If, they are
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told
all things the
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children
are aware what is
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good
or
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bad
things for themselves. Needless to say, all these merits stand in a
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good
stead.

However
, the latter view suggests that an institution is the
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best
place to
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learn
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new
things.
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this
is to express, the
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children
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meet
as well
as
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make
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new
persons.
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So
, they gain the ability and
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learn
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new
culture or tradition, it is
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very
beneficial for themselves.
Besides
this, the school is the
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best
place to
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learn
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new
things
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best
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many
students study in school and teacher have more know-how as compared parents.
Therefore
, the
easily
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teach
the manners to
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children
with face any problem.
Hence
, it is apparent why
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many
are in
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favour
this trend.

In the nutshell,
nevertheless
, weighing the boot options, I believe that there is no single conclusion
still
, I take this ground the effective clap require
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use
of both hands.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good in society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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