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Some people think that parents should restrict their children from watching TV and playing computer games Instead time should be spent on reading books Do you agree disagree

Some people think that parents should restrict their children from watching TV and playing computer games Instead time should be spent on reading books Do you agree disagree MM3Ja
Childhood is the most precious time for everybody. Some people believe that parents need to control their children from watching television and gaming on computers. Instead, they should guide children towards reading books. I contradict with this as there are many benefits to being engaged with TV and computers. Television plays an important role in educating children about the society. It hosts many shows which target the children. There are various channels such as Cartoon Network, Disney and Pogo which show the fictional characters in a fun-filled and enjoyable manner. TV program. . .
Childhood is the most precious time for everybody.
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IELTS essay Some people think that parents should restrict their children from watching TV and playing computer games Instead time should be spent on reading books Do you agree disagree

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94 words
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