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Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. mopd
According to some people technological innovations have made people more sociable; however, others disagree with that view. In my opinion modern technology is making people more sociable but at the same time it hinders the face to face interaction among people. I will explain my view in this essay. On the one hand, it is an irrefutable fact that modern technology has shrunk our big planet earth into a small global village. Now it is possible for a person to contact his kith and kin who are sitting on the other side of the planet with the use of the internet and mobile phones or laptops on a regular basis. This frequent contact among family members and friends strengthens the bond. Moreover, with the advent of fast transport systems / services like metro trains, bullet trains and flights the distance and travel time has minimised and it is now possible for people to visit their relatives living in other countries or states more frequently. Obviously, technology has increased the interactions among people. On the other hand, sometimes, children and adults become so obsessed with technology that they avoid in-person interaction with their relatives and friends. Children become so engrossed with new gadgets that they avoid spending time with their parents and friends. What is more, with the advent of e-commerce and various other websites now people are able to buy commodities of daily need or pay their bills online and this again has limited the actual interaction among people. To conclude, I reiterate that modern technology has given people a platform to stay in touch with their loved ones but at the same time it has taken out face to face interactions from the equation.
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technological innovations have made
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more sociable;
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, others disagree with that view. In my opinion modern
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is making
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people
more sociable
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at the same
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it hinders the
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among
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. I will
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my view in this essay.

On the one hand, it is an irrefutable fact that modern
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technology
has shrunk our
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big
planet earth into a
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small
global village.
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Now
it is possible for a person to contact his kith and kin who are sitting on the
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other
side of the planet with the
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use
of the internet and mobile phones or laptops on a regular basis. This frequent contact among family members and friends strengthens the bond.
Moreover
, with the advent of
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fast
transport systems / services like metro trains, bullet trains and flights the distance and travel
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time
has
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minimised
and it is
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now
possible for
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people
to visit their relatives living in
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other
countries or states more
frequently
.
Obviously
,
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technology
has increased the
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interactions
among
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people
.

On the
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hand,
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sometimes
, children and adults become
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so
obsessed with
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technology
that they avoid in-person
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interaction
with their relatives and friends. Children become
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so
engrossed with new gadgets that they avoid spending
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time
with their parents and friends.
What is more
, with the advent of e-commerce and various
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other
websites
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now
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people
are able to
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buy
commodities of daily need or pay their bills online and this again has limited the actual
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interaction
among
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people
.

To conclude
, I reiterate that modern
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technology
has
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given
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people
a platform to stay in touch with their
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loved
ones
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but
at the same
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time
it has taken out
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to
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face
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interactions
from the equation.
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IELTS essay Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable.

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285 words
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