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Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People with permanent jobs do not have to worry about financial issues as they can secure their present and future. For example, permanent employees can recieve bank loans for doing huge investments and able to invest money to earn more. In addition, people who are away from the tension of searching fixed job and saving money, can easily concentrate on other aspects of life such as they can follow their passion. Some people love to enjoy their hobbies of music, sports or travel around the world. Therefore, while doing permanent job, people can enjoy their life and remain financially secured and satisfied.
People
with permanent jobs do not
have to
worry about financial issues as they can secure their present and future.
For example
, permanent employees can
recieve
bank loans for doing huge investments and able to invest money to earn more.
In addition
,
people
who are away from the tension of searching
fixed
job and saving money, can
easily
concentrate on other aspects of life such as they can follow their passion.
Some
people
love
to enjoy their hobbies of music, sports or travel around the world.
Therefore
, while doing permanent job,
people
can enjoy their life and remain
financially
secured and satisfied.
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IELTS essay Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important.

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