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Some people think that having people from different nationalities and culture background to a country get a faster development. To what extend do you agree??

Some people think that having people from different nationalities and culture background to a country get a faster development. ? e5byx
It is a fact that almost all countries, including the United States of America, have different population groups from other countries. In this essay, I will be discussing on how I strongly agree to why having expats from various countries with different cultural backgrounds can help a certain country grow vastly. Many people these days immigrate to foreign countries. This is due to gaining more income, having a better life, or just fulfilling the dream to live in a place with great tourist attractions and views. United States of America's population are comprised of various nationalities from all continents such as Filipinos, Indians, Koreans, Chinese, English, and many more. All of these nationalities come from unique countries along with their cultural backgrounds, thus, they practice those even if they are in an alien country. Moreover, these cultural traditions also affect a person's personality, behavior, and attitude especially at work. For example, Filipinos value respect and punctuality. When working in a foreign country, they tend to come early for work and they always respectful to their boss and colleagues, which promotes peace and unity among co-workers. Aside from work, the different cultural traditions are also being experienced by the original citizens of a country as shared with the foreign ones. Let's take the country Saudi Arabia as an example. Before, they don't allow parties and loud music, but through the influence from other nationalities, they are slowly embracing it now. To summarize, having different nationalities with various unique cultural beliefs or traditions will help a certain country to be more developed not only economically, but also it opens the mind of the people on embracing such beautiful and new traditions which they can enjoy or adapt. Through this acceptance, the people will prosper and the country will grow.
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different
population groups from other
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countries
. In this essay, I will be discussing on how I
strongly
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agree
to why having expats from various
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countries
with
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different
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cultural
backgrounds can
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help
a certain
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country
grow
vastly
.

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people
these days immigrate to foreign
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countries
. This is due to gaining more income, having a better life, or
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just
fulfilling the dream to
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live
in a place with great tourist attractions and views. United States of America's population
are comprised
of various
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nationalities
from all continents such as Filipinos, Indians, Koreans, Chinese, English, and
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many
more. All of these
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nationalities
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come
from unique
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countries
along with their
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cultural
backgrounds,
thus
, they practice those even if they are in an alien country.

Moreover
, these
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cultural
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traditions
also
affect a person's personality, behavior, and attitude
especially
at work.
For example
, Filipinos value respect and punctuality. When working in a foreign
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country
, they tend to
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come
early for
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work and
they always respectful to their boss and colleagues, which promotes peace and unity among co-workers. Aside from work, the
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different
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cultural
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traditions
are
also
being experienced
by the original citizens of a
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country
as shared with the foreign ones.
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Let
's take the
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country
Saudi Arabia as an example.
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Before
, they don't
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allow
parties and loud music,
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but
through the influence from other
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nationalities
, they are
slowly
embracing it
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now
.

To summarize
, having
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different
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nationalities
with various unique
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cultural
beliefs or
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traditions
will
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help
a certain
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country
to be more developed not
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only
economically
,
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but
also
it opens the mind of the
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people
on embracing such
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beautiful
and new
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traditions
which they can enjoy or adapt. Through this acceptance, the
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people
will prosper and the
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country
will grow.
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IELTS essay Some people think that having people from different nationalities and culture background to a country get a faster development. ?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
7
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