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Some people think that government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view? v.7

Some people think that government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be spent elsewhere. v. 7
Art is a way of expressing human creative skills and imaginations in visual forms such as painting, sculpture, drawing and photography. Art not only gives the information about our past times, but also connect us with our ancestors. Therefore, I completely disagree with the above statement that government is wasting money on the arts. (54) We had seen in the past that all the governments paid much attention to preserve the arts. In many parts of the world, art was used to reflect the culture of a country and to develop the understanding of people towards their history. (42) Presently, art is considered as national heritage. In many countries, governments are allocating proper funds to the arts and are establishing several organizations to maintain and preserve various arts of their country. For example, Canada, USA, UK and Australia have the art museums that exhibit ancient arts. People who are interested in the arts often came in these historical buildings to see the art galleries. In addition, people in many countries are now treating art as a great form of entertainment. For instance, exhibitions and crafts display several artistic creations like paintings, clay buildings, paper arts, and glass paintings. (99) The recent encouragement of arts from the government has improved the livelihood of thousands of people who actually depend on the arts. Thus, if the government keeps on boosting the arts, then art galleries will surely become a great source of inspirations in the near future. (46) Thus, art is playing a very important role in the lives of people, therefore the government has to ensure that the arts are financed properly in a variety of forms like museums, art galleries and exhibitions. (36)
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Art
is a way of expressing human creative
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skills
and imaginations in visual forms such as painting, sculpture, drawing and photography.
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Art
not
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only
gives the information about our past times,
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but
also
connect us with our ancestors.
Therefore
, I completely disagree with the above statement that
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government
is wasting money on the
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arts
. (54)

We had
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seen
in the past that all the
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governments
paid much attention to preserve the
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arts
. In
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many
parts of the world,
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art
was
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used
to reflect the culture of a
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country
and to develop the understanding of
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people
towards their history. (42)

Presently
,
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art
is considered
as national heritage. In
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many
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countries
,
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governments
are allocating proper funds to the
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arts
and are establishing several organizations to maintain and preserve various
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arts
of their
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country
.
For example
, Canada, USA, UK and Australia have the
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art
museums that exhibit ancient
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arts
.
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People
who
are interested
in the
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arts
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often
came in these historical buildings to
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see
the
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art
galleries.
In addition
,
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people
in
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many
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countries
are
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now
treating
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art
as a great form of entertainment.
For instance
, exhibitions and crafts display several artistic creations like paintings, clay buildings, paper
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arts
, and glass paintings. (99)

The recent encouragement of
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arts
from the
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government
has
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improved
the livelihood of thousands of
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people
who actually depend on the
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arts
.
Thus
, if the
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government
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keeps
on boosting the
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arts
, then
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art
galleries will
surely
become a great source of inspirations in the near future. (46)

Thus
,
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art
is playing a
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very
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important
role in the
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lives
of
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people
,
therefore
the
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government
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has to
ensure that the
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arts
are financed
properly
in a variety of forms like museums,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
galleries and exhibitions. (36)
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
Language is to the mind more than light is to the eye.
William Gibson

IELTS essay Some people think that government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be spent elsewhere. v. 7

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
282 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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