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Some people think the goverment is wasting money on arts and that this money could be spent elsewhere.

Some people think the goverment is wasting money on arts and that this money could be spent elsewhere.

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This is argued that the authorities waste money on art-oriental fields, and this money could be spent on, more crutial aspects of people's day to day life. I partly support this opinion, as i think there could be more efficient distribution of state treasury than we have today. Firstly, as we know, despite all of the economical and social improvment that the world had in past century, we as humanity still have a number of issuses to solve to. Be it something, as essensial as, global warming or something as simple as poor quality of roads, the goverment still have a long list of problems it must treat. For example, there is an increasing cases of car accidents in Azerbaijan, due to the fact that, the number of traffic lights in the country can be counted on fingers of one hand. It is clear that, the reason of this is the funding that the Ministry of Transport, Communications and High Technologies has to deal with. Secondly, the amount of money that the art gets are simply unjustified. It is connected to unpredictibile the nature of the art. There are many recorded occasions when relativly new art projects gets destroyed, simoly because the new trend goes on in the world. For example, the national flag of Azrbaijan, that was recorded in the Guinness book, as the highest flag in the world. The record was beaten in just three years by the national flag of Turkmenistan. As a result, money of both countries was spent on something so useless as this childish cimpetition. In conclution, I think that there are many more issues that money could resolve in both economical ot social fields, art bieng last of them.
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Overall Band Score: 5
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5
The essay addresses the task but does not fully develop the argument. Some points are underexplored, and the conclusion is weak.
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5
The vocabulary used is somewhat limited and contains several spelling errors. There is an attempt to use topic-related vocabulary, but it lacks precision and variety.
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5
The essay presents a clear argument but lacks logical flow and organization. Ideas are not always well-connected, leading to some confusion.
Grammatical Range
4.5
There are numerous grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement and punctuation issues. The sentence structures are mostly simple, lacking complexity.

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