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Some people think parents should teach their children to be good members of the society whereas others believe it is school. Discuss both these points of view and give your own opinion.

Some people think parents should teach their children to be good members of the society whereas others believe it is school. KwoN1
Education is important to children because it enhances them wisdom activates creativity and helps them to be aware. In context of this childhood being the most crucial and influential phase of developing good moral character, both the presented views are logical and carry unique equivalence in their own part which this essay discusses here with my opinion as well. During childhood children spend most of their time with their parents and guardians imitating their activities and learning various traits, behaviors, as well as developing interests which further gets imprinted on the behavioral memory. Many people believe that being the first teacher and closest ones with children, parents must teach their offspring adequate manners, etiquette, and protocols. Thus, Parents should take preliminary measures towards educating their offspring in order to make them good members of the society. On the other hand, Some people vociferously argue that idea of parents being teacher of social educate is abstract. They strongly believe that schools are most responsible for academic as well as nonacademic education including social approach towards turning children into good members of the society. They further consider that a social demeanor of the children is result of environment of school. Children learn so much from teachers, staffs, and more especially from their peer groups. Despite differences in culture, religion, and social approach, school has become a common destination for exchange of habits and behaviors. Also, some children go to boarding school in case of which school is solely responsible for children's habit, practice, and moral development. Ultimately, I think both parents at home and school play vital role in order to educate the children and make them fit in the society as good members nevertheless, In my opinion school can better guide children because parents are busy in the quest of material success and are unable to give proper time to the children. Also, some parents may be abroad while others might be in risk for betterment of family.
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children
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because
it enhances them wisdom activates creativity and
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helps
them to be aware. In context of this childhood being the most crucial and influential phase of developing
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good
moral character, both the presented views are logical and carry unique equivalence in their
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part which this essay discusses here with my opinion
as well
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During childhood
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children
spend most of their time with their
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parents
and guardians imitating their activities and learning various traits, behaviors,
as well
as developing interests which
further
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gets
imprinted on the behavioral memory.
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people
believe that being the
first
teacher and closest ones with
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children
,
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parents
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must
teach their offspring adequate manners, etiquette, and protocols.
Thus
,
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should take preliminary measures towards educating their offspring in order to
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them
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good
members of the society.

On the other hand
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vociferously
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of
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parents
being teacher of
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social
educate is abstract. They
strongly
believe that
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schools
are most responsible for academic
as well
as nonacademic education including
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social
approach towards turning
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children
into
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good
members of the society. They
further
consider that a
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social
demeanor of the
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children
is result of environment of
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school
.
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Children
learn
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much from teachers, staffs, and more
especially
from their peer groups. Despite differences in culture, religion, and
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social
approach,
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school
has become a common destination for exchange of habits and behaviors.
Also
,
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some
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children
go to boarding
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school
in case of which
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school
is
solely
responsible for children's habit, practice, and moral development.

Ultimately
, I
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think
both
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parents
at home and
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school
play vital role in order to educate the
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children
and
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make
them fit in the society as
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good
members
nevertheless
, In my opinion
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school
can better guide
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children
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because
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parents
are busy in the quest of material success and are unable to give proper time to the
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children
.
Also
,
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some
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parents
may be abroad while others might be in
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risk
for betterment of family.
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IELTS essay Some people think parents should teach their children to be good members of the society whereas others believe it is school.

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