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Some people think parents are responsible for transporting their children to school. Others think it is the government's responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think parents are responsible for transporting their children to school. Others think it is the government's responsibility. lADK
It is argued by some that Government should be held accountable for Pupils transportation to schools, whilst others think that parent should drive their children to school and pick them up there. This essay agrees that government should take transportation of students into account. If authorities consider children as a treasure source for the future of a country, therefore all the basic requirement that they may struggle with such as transportation should be considered. Transport Students to school is one the crucial part of the daily routine that sometimes can be dangerous for them. For instance, A survey conducted by Sapienza University Represent that 15% of the adults have at least one accident experience when they are coming back from school in their childhood. It is therefore agreed that Government should take care of Students by Special vehicles that is suitable for them. On the other hand, many disagree and feel that it is more secure if parents take this responsibility in order to accompany their children to school and pick them up after schools finish. Moreover, they argue that children are more comfortable when they are with their parents. Despite that individuals are the biggest problem of traffic congestion and children could benefit greatly from communication with others during the transportation. The Times recently reported one third of traffic jams during the schools timetable is associated with individuals who tried to pick their children up. In conclusion, While some people think that government Should be responsible for our next generation facilities such as transportation, despite all the problem with traffic jam, other think that children feel more comfortable with their parents in this issue.
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of students into account.

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children
as a treasure source for the future of a country,
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transportation
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be considered
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the crucial part of the daily routine that
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Sapienza
University Represent that 15% of the adults have at least one accident experience when they are coming back from
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school
in their childhood. It is
therefore
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agreed
that
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that is
suitable for them.

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hand,
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disagree and feel that it is more secure if
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parents
take this responsibility in order to accompany their
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school
and pick them up after
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schools
finish.
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children
are more comfortable when they are with their
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parents
. Despite that individuals are the biggest problem of traffic congestion and
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children
could benefit
greatly
from communication with others during the
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transportation
. The Times recently reported one third of traffic jams during the
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schools
timetable
is associated
with individuals who tried to pick their
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children
up.

In conclusion
, While
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people
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think
that
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government
Should be responsible for our
next
generation facilities such as
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transportation
, despite all the problem with traffic jam,
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other
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think
that
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children
feel more comfortable with their
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parents
in this issue.
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IELTS essay Some people think parents are responsible for transporting their children to school. Others think it is the government's responsibility.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
275 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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