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Some people say that the only one reason for learning foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reason why some one should learn a foreign language.

Some people say that the only one reason for learning foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reason why some one should learn a foreign language. A5j3
It may consider by some that, learn bilingual languages for the purpose of advance to immigration and work in a developed country. On the other hand, it may argued by some that, this is not the actual aim to study international languages. This essay will be discuss about these point of views before draw a opinion. First, it is a true fact that some people oftenly belived that acquire international language knowledge ability benefits to stimulate the person to accelerate and brake the stumbling rock in the communication barrier. Subsequently, indiviguals have a positive advantage attain to combat to the problems encountered from the foreign language. A good illustration for this is, people those posses a high language skills had been advanced to the developed nation. Consequently, they can acchive a extremely good position in the job fields as well as they can splendid and assure the appreciations from collegues. For instance, my brother who completed degree from oxford university and capable of a great level of language skills immigrate to canada and suddenly he acquired an good job with handsome salary. Apart from that, some people think that this is not the actual reason behind to study the foreign language. To put it in another way, there are people who oftenly pursue to attain benefits from international language for the purpose to gain a peak level in the future business. For example, people who intend to plan future carrier in trade follow a great passion to accumulate knowledge in diffrent languages. In conclusion, language plays a paramount role in the carrier as well as the future. Moreover, most of the people plan to eradicate the pitfall in the language problems by put a vigorous industrious on the study of international language. In my opinion indiviguals had a great benefits from bilingual language. In addition, it will plays a significant role in the indiviguals future improvements because of the communication barrier prevent all the chances to improve ones carrier to peak level.
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developed country
.
On the other hand
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argued
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some
that, this is not the actual aim to study
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international
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languages
. This essay will be
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discuss about these
point of views
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before
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, it is a true fact that
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some
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people
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oftenly
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belived
that acquire
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international
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language
knowledge ability benefits to stimulate the person to accelerate and brake the stumbling rock in the communication barrier.
Subsequently
,
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indiviguals
have a
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positive
advantage attain to combat to the problems encountered from the foreign
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language
. A
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good
illustration for this is,
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people
those posses a high
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language
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skills
had
been advanced
to the developed nation.
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, they can
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acchive
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extremely
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good
position in the job fields
as well
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collegues
.
For instance
, my brother who completed degree from oxford university and capable of a great level of
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language
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skills
immigrate to
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canada
and
suddenly
he acquired
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an
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good
job with handsome salary.

Apart from that,
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think
that this is not the actual reason behind to study the foreign
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language
. To put it in another way, there are
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people
who
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oftenly
pursue to attain benefits from
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international
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language
for the purpose to gain a peak level in the
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future
business.
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,
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people
who intend to plan
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future
carrier in trade follow a great passion to accumulate knowledge in
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diffrent
languages.

In conclusion
,
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language
plays a paramount role in the carrier
as well
as the
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future
.
Moreover
, most of the
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people
plan to eradicate the pitfall in the
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language
problems by put a vigorous industrious on the study of
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international
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language
. In my opinion
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indiviguals
had a great benefits from bilingual
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language
.
In addition
, it will
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plays
a significant role in the
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indiviguals
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future
improvements
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because
of the communication barrier
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prevent
all the chances to
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improve
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ones
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IELTS essay Some people say that the only one reason for learning foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reason why some one should learn a foreign language.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
332 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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