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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets, and there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.

Technology has revolutionised the way audiences watch movies these days. With smartphones and tablets, we can now watch movies anywhere and anytime. Some people believe that this is a substitute for going to the cinema. However, I would argue that movie theatres deliver an unparalleled experience as not all movies can be enjoyed on small screens. On the one hand, the advent of smart devices has put the cinema business at stake. Recently, many people have begun relying on their smartphones to watch their favourite videos and movies at their convenience. For example, many mobile applications, such as Netflix, provide users access to millions of contents at an affordable price, including those that are not shown in theatres. This has given people a good reason to enjoy movies with their family at home. In contrast, it would be costly and inconvenient if people have to watch movies in the cinema. On the other hand, On the other hand, theatres give an unmatched experience that viewers can not get while watching movies on a small hand-held screen. For example, in movie theatres, films are projected on a large screen with a high-quality surrounding sound system and a comfy seat, where watchers can enjoy the film to its fullest. In addition, many cinema providers have recently introduced new theatre concepts to cater to various customer segments and included a wide range of cuisines to their dine-in options. If cinemas ceased to exist, movie-lovers would not fulfil their need for an immersive experience. Moreover, watching movies in a theatre is more than enjoying a movie, it is a great way of socialising. In conclusion, despite the convenience the smart devices provide for movie-watchers, I strongly believe that theatres still remain an important option, especially for movie-goers, who prefer experience over convenience.
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the way audiences
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these days. With smartphones and tablets, we can
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anywhere and anytime.
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believe that this is a substitute for going to the
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movie
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theatres
deliver an unparalleled
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experience
as not all
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movies
can
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small
screens.

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cinema
business at stake. Recently,
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many
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people
have begun relying on their smartphones to
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watch
their
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videos and
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movies
at their convenience.
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,
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many
mobile applications, such as Netflix, provide users access to millions of contents at an affordable price, including those that are not shown in
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theatres
. This has
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a
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reason to enjoy
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movies
with their family at home.
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, it would be costly and inconvenient if
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people
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have to
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in the cinema.

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theatres
give an unmatched
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experience
that viewers can not
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get
while watching
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movies
on a
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small
hand-held screen.
For example
, in
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movie
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theatres
, films
are projected
on a large screen with a high-quality surrounding sound system and a comfy seat, where watchers can enjoy the film to its fullest.
In addition
,
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many
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cinema
providers have recently introduced new
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theatre
concepts to cater to various customer segments and included a wide range of cuisines to their dine-in options. If
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cinemas
ceased to exist, movie-lovers would not fulfil their need for an immersive
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experience
.
Moreover
, watching
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movies
in a
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theatre
is more than enjoying a
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movie
, it is a great way of
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socialising
.

In conclusion
, despite the convenience the smart devices provide for movie-watchers, I
strongly
believe that
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theatres
still
remain an
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important
option,
especially
for movie-goers, who prefer
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experience
over convenience.

IELTS essay Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets, and there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.

Essay
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4 paragraphs
298 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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