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Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? LrwGK
Advertisments play a very key role in any business now a days. As there are so many media and social media plateforms the advertisments methods have also changed alot which made our life easier because we can find out market prices of anything while sitting at home but some people things that advertisments just alure people to buy stuff that are of know use to them. This essay will discuss weather advertisments make good impact on out lives or because of advertisments we buy useless things Alot of people think that advertisments of all kinds are not good, the reason is that they make people buy material which are of no use to them. The main reason why people think this is some time when you buy an item from a store or from an online shop they also suggest relatable items and can maupulate people to buy them aswel just on the basis of their advertisments for example one of our neighbour wanted to buy a cricket bat from an online store, when he visited the sports sections of that store's website he found alot of other amazing items and offers there and at that moment he bought cricket balls with bat aswel as there was a 50% sale on balls In contrary, with the paragraph above, there are also big advantages of advertisments. One of them is advertisments tell us about new stuff avalible in market, there prices and there uses which improve our way of work and life like in our part of the country car business is at its peaks now a days and alot of people are in this business. Thanks to advertisments this business is on top as people advertise there cars on internet and get customers easily. Linking to the above lines owning to advertisments people also come to know about the item in market, which they didnt know existed. In further to above example my brother is also in car bsuiness alot of time he bought car, those car had problem most of them were re furbished and resprayed, one day while surfing on internet he found an ad in whcih ther was a machine avalible which could help you find refurbished parts in car. Before this ad we didnt knew such thing exists in market Looking at the above two paragraphs, we can see everything has a good side and a bad side. in this case I think the advertisment is a main pillar of any business and help you improve your life because it can tell you about stuff which can make your life easy as i mentioned in tha example happened to my brother
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Advertisments
play a
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key role in any
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business
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now a days
. As there are
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many
media and social media
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plateforms
the
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advertisments
methods have
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changed
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alot
which made our
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life
easier
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because
we can find out market prices of anything while sitting at home
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but
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some
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things that
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advertisments
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just
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alure
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people
to
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buy
stuff that are of know
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use
to them. This essay will discuss weather
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advertisments
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make
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good
impact on out
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lives
or
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because
of
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advertisments
we
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useless
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things


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of
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people
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think
that
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advertisments
of all kinds are not
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good
, the reason is that they
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make
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people
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buy
material which are of no
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use
to them. The main reason why
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people
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think
this is
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some
time when you
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buy
an
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item
from a store or from an online shop they
also
suggest relatable
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items
and can
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maupulate
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people
to
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buy
them
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aswel
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just
on the basis of their
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advertisments
for example
one of our
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neighbour
wanted to
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buy
a cricket bat from an online store, when he visited the sports sections of that store's website he found
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alot
of other amazing
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items
and offers there and at that moment he
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bought
cricket balls with bat
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aswel
as there was a 50% sale on
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balls


In contrary, with the paragraph
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above
, there are
also
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big
advantages of
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advertisments
. One of them is
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advertisments
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tell
us about new stuff
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avalible
in market, there prices and there
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uses
which
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improve
our way of work and
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life
like in our part of the country
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car
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business
is at its peaks
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now a days
and
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alot
of
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people
are in this
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business
. Thanks to
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advertisments
this
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business
is on top as
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people
advertise there
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cars
on internet and
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get
customers
easily
. Linking to the
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lines owning to
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advertisments
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people
also
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come
to know about the
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item
in market, which they
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didnt
know existed. In
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to
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also
in
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car
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bsuiness
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alot
of time he
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bought
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car
, those
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car
had problem most of them were re furbished and resprayed, one day while surfing on internet he found an ad in
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whcih
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ther
was a machine
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avalible
which could
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help
you find refurbished parts in
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.
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Before
this ad we
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didnt
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market


Looking at the
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two paragraphs, we can
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the
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advertisment
is a main pillar of any
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business
and
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help
you
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improve
your
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life
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tell
you about stuff which can
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easy as
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brother
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IELTS essay Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
444 words
5.5
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