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Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? BNYX
advertising is a skill which is really helpful for marketers to sell their non profit product too. advertising really encourage people to buy unnecessary product which don't need us. advertising engages all type of people and attract people owrads the product even though they dislike the particular product. if marketers change the packaging of the product and the item in the box is same as before we have used. it will attract more people. however, packaging is also an attracting point and it falls in marketing. one example is here that sometimes I don't need to buy clothes via online because it really very expensive for me and it may be damaged product sometime. however, whenever I browses some online websites or scrolling on facebook, some of my favorite brands advertisement attract towards them and I buy these products even I don't have money. in the end I take loan from my mother. In the end, advertising really attract buyers towards their product and marketers have very good skills to attract their target market.
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advertising
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which is
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helpful for marketers to sell their
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non profit
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product
too.
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advertising
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really
encourage
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people
to
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buy
unnecessary
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product
which don't need us.

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advertising
engages all type of
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people
and
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attract
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people
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owrads
the
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product
even though
they dislike the particular
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product
.
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if
marketers
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change
the packaging of the
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product
and the item in the box is same as
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before
we have
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used
.
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it
will
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attract
more
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people
.
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however
, packaging is
also
an attracting point and it falls in marketing.

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example is here that
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I don't need to
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buy
clothes via online
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because
it
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really
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very
expensive for me and it may
be damaged
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product
sometime.
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however
, whenever I
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browses
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some
online websites or scrolling on
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facebook
,
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some
of my favorite brands advertisement
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attract
towards them and I
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buy
these
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products
even I don't have money.
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in
the
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I take loan from my mother.

In the
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end
, advertising
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really
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attract
buyers towards their
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product
and marketers have
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very
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good
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skills
to
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attract
their target market.
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IELTS essay Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

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