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Some people get into debt by buying things they do not need and cannot afford. What are the reasons for this behavior ? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

It is argued that, people tend to be more luxuries as they do not think about there economical status and spend more than there capabilities and fell into debts. To encounter, the issues which they face further should be taken care. This essay will discuss about problems we face, in case of buying unnecessary essentials which a person cannot afford. The first and foremost reasons to have financial crisis is all because of Fantancy Over Life. Younger Generations are fascinated to have Sports Bikes, Gadgets, Cars etc. For Instance, If his or her family is not in the position to afford that, but youth makes pressure to get it. As there is no way to fulfill there desire, then families take loans and can't pay them so it goes on increasing with interest rates and suffer a lot with increase in debts. However, it should be taken care by parents, by making a strict gaze on them. They are supposed to tell their children about their financial status and also pros and cons about the effects they suffer in future because of debts. For example, person who is having such pleasures should make him think of his own life and destructions that causes to him because of his thought process. One should think about his source of income before enjoying or buying things which are unworthy for them. And, they should stop comparing with others. These will help people to solve the problem and get out of crisis. In conclusion, I believe that, In order to get rid of obligations one should move or make things which are required for them and avoid buying essentials which are not needed.
It
is argued
that,
people
tend to be more luxuries as they do not
think
about there
economical
status and spend more than there capabilities and fell into debts. To encounter, the issues which they face
further
should
be taken
care. This essay will
discuss about problems
we face, in case of buying unnecessary essentials which a person cannot afford. The
first
and foremost reasons to have financial crisis is all
because
of
Fantancy
Over Life. Younger Generations
are fascinated
to have Sports Bikes, Gadgets, Cars etc.
For Instance
, If
his or her
family is not in the position to afford that,
but
youth
makes
pressure to
get
it. As there is no way to fulfill there desire, then families take loans and can't pay them
so
it goes on increasing with interest rates and suffer a lot with increase in debts.
However
, it should
be taken
care by parents, by making a strict gaze on them. They
are supposed
to
tell
their children about their financial status and
also
pros and cons about the effects they suffer in future
because
of debts.
For example
, person who is having such pleasures should
make
him
think
of his
own
life and
destructions
that causes to him
because
of his
thought
process. One should
think
about his source of income
before
enjoying or buying things which are unworthy for them. And, they should
stop
comparing with others. These will
help
people
to solve the problem and
get
out of crisis.
In conclusion
, I believe that, In order to
get
rid of obligations one should
move
or
make
things which
are required
for them and avoid buying essentials which are not needed.
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IELTS essay Some people get into debt by buying things they do not need and cannot afford. What are the reasons for this behavior? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
279 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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