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some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). to what extend do you agree or disagree

some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). jGed

It is argued that high school pupils should be mandatory involved in voluntary community activities. I totally agree with the statement, as this kind of work will develop social responsibility and personal soft skills of involved individuals. In the following essay, I will cite my arguments. First of all, young people are not always aware of social and environmental issues of their own local community. Early engagement into voluntary projects will definitely benefit their social responsibility level as they become acknowledged how we could affect the environment where we live. For example, if the person involved in ecological organization and participate in related events, he gets to know that using a bike instead of a car, could considerably improve the quality of air in district, the use of recycled and environment friendly products could positively impact our ecology. The more younger generation had conscious understanding of local and global issues, the better world we could build. Secondly, being involved in charity work will considerably improve soft skills of our pupils. Every activity requires from them to develop at least one acumen, such as communication skill when you need to host negotiations, presentation skills when you perform in front of auditory, project management skill if you are responsible for an event etc. For example, when I was at high school, I participated in school voluntary project in supporting kids from deprived areas. Our task was to help them improve their academic results by holding extra-curriculum classes and helping with homework. From that experience I learnt how to communicate with various people, how to plan my schedule and perform in front unknown audience. In conclusion, I personally believe that involving high school pupils into charity work will benefit not only local communities, but the persons participated in the program by raising social responsible citizens with strong soft skills.

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 of involved individuals. In the following essay, I will cite my arguments.

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 of recycled and environment friendly products could positively
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skill
 when you need to host negotiations, presentation You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdexterityartistryaccomplishmentprowessingenuityart
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, when I was at high You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstituteacademyuniversityhalljailfaculty
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 voluntary project in supporting kids from deprived areas. Our task was to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
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improve
 their academic results by holding extra-curriculum classes and helping with homework. From that experience I Possible spelling mistake. 'learnt' is British English.learned
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 how to communicate with various This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
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, how to plan my schedule and perform in front unknown audience.

In conclusion
, I personally
 believe that involving high You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstituteacademyuniversityhalljailfaculty
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 pupils into charity work will benefit not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 local communities, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 the persons participated in the program by raising You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcivilcommunal
social
 responsible citizens with strong soft You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdexterityartistryaccomplishmentprowessingenuityart
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. 