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Some people believe that job provides both income and a social life, while others think that friends should be made outside of work. Discuss both views and give your opinion

According to some people a job provides not only a steady income but also an opportunity to make friends. However, others feel that having friends at the workplace is not a good idea. In my opinion, there are both merits and demerits to having friends in office. While your friends in office can make your work life less stressful, they may also expose your personal life. The main advantage of making friends with colleagues is that you will enjoy the time spend at the workplace a lot more. Most people these days spend 8-10 hours a day in their office. If they are friends with their colleagues, the long working hours will be less stressful for them. Also, if you have friends in the office, you can seek their support when you have pending tasks or when you want to take a day off. In such situations, they are likely to offer help or fill in for you. On the other hand, when your close friends are your colleagues you run the risk of getting your personal life exposed. Wittingly or unwittingly, your friends may reveal details of your family life or financial situation with others in the office. For example, one of my friends was going through a bitter divorce battle. He had not discussed this with anyone in the office except one colleague who was also his close friend. Unfortunately, he told others in the office about this and my friend felt so embarrassed and upset. In conclusion, it is great to have friends at work as they offer support when we need it and make time spent in the office more enjoyable. However, they may also make it difficult to keep personal life and professional life separate. Even so, I am in favour of having friends in office.
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. While your
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less stressful, they may
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The main advantage of making
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is that you will enjoy the time spend at the workplace a lot more. Most
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these days spend 8-10 hours a day in their
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. If they are
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with their
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, the long working hours will be less stressful for them.
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in the
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, you can seek their support when you have pending tasks or when you want to take a day off. In such situations, they are likely to offer
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On the
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hand, when your close
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exposed.
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may reveal
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of your family
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life
or financial situation with others in the
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.
For example
, one of my
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was going through a bitter divorce battle. He had not discussed this with anyone in the
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except one
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about this and my
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felt
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embarrassed and upset.

In conclusion
, it is great to have
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at work as they offer support when we need it and
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time spent in the
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more enjoyable.
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it difficult to
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personal
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and professional
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separate. Even
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, I am in
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IELTS essay Some people believe that job provides both income and a social life, while others think that friends should be made outside of work. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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